this was the drop i did last week for the topical contest here t didn't win and i still want feed back so tell me what you think

Doc we need your help it’s a shot victim/
Shit I say running to the e.r see the body “ damn how many times did they hit him”/
Swear I can see part of the stretcher through some of the holes in him/
“we gonna have to operate to get the shells outta him”/
Gas him open him and start this operation/
After two hours he’s alright for the night but more operating is what he’s facin/
An early start four in the morning against the clock we’re chasin/
He needs a new lung and now removing the old one/
A sneeze cut to long a flat line his heart beat’s gone/
Thinking he’s done already start thinking bout the funeral song/
A beat’s back and we continue now trying to repair the long cut/
The nurse bends over to get a pair of scissors I lose focus and now just wanna bust a nut/
It’s all over he made it start wrappin him up like king tut/
The nurse wheels him out looking down at the table “shit!!”/
The new lung’s still here I hear the patent scream in a fit/
Chase out there it’s to late he’s covered in his own bloody spit/
Confusion in court facin me practice and I’m losin/
Not in jail but in hell dependant now on my boozin/
If I paid attention it wouldn’t of happen /
My lesson in this is that one mistake causes a bad chain reaction/
The events in which there’s no real escapin/

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win loss record 18-19 with 7 k.o's


and sign up for the battle league would yeah, also show up if your already in the league