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Old 11-20-04, 11:26 PM   #1
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I just titled it that, ^ hoping more people would view it...

Desired Signs

Below the earth’s core or above the crescent moon…
Our world is filled with deceit, lies, hate, and doom…
If our above disappeared, would it be hell we still feared…?
An image of self-loathing wouldn’t likely be jeered…
Heaven and hell convey a split-universe…
Hell equals the end…Or an escape for the worst…?
One little word raises you from the depths of where you fell…
Asking the eternal question, will it be heaven or hell…?
It too late for the first, or is it time for the latter…?
Is there really a difference, do my actions even matter…?
Spoken like a true poet, these words conjour up emotions…
Is it a sign for the future or just a thought-provoking notion…?
The signs I see, appear eerily…
So hell is where I’m headed, as they vanish into thee…
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Old 11-20-04, 11:47 PM   #2
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Good drop... Good job on the vocab... Really liked the first line, good way to open it up... Keep Dropping... 8.5/10...
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Old 11-21-04, 12:45 AM   #3
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its good cuz..
it got better in the middle for real..
8.5/10
real nice..

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Old 11-21-04, 11:35 PM   #4
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Thanks man, preciate it.
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Old 11-22-04, 12:42 AM   #5
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This was a good poem, your vocabulary was great, descriptive and animated, hope to see more drops from you, overall nice job...1
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Old 11-22-04, 11:39 PM   #6
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Thanx fluid...very appreciated...
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Old 11-25-04, 04:17 PM   #7
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uppin.. .
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Old 11-25-04, 11:49 PM   #8
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im gonna agree with both fluid and indeph...this was very good shit......8.6/10

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