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12-07-04, 09:14 PM
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This Piano
IP: 283B 08F8
This Piano
Johnny loved that piano, with all of his heart.. Since he got it on his birthday, admired it right from the start.. He would practice during the day, start off slow, but contiue to play.. Wouldn't try to erase his love, for this game the piano gave.. He didn't love it for the music, he loved the piano for what he saw.. Black and white keys working together, he would wonder in awe.. "Can black and white really work like that? Or is this just a fake?".. "For living where I grow up, a piano and people can't relate".. For his own sake he debated with himself over this reason for days.. Black and white keys working together? He was just so amazed.. Symbollical meaning in such a simple object, the ideas a piano can hold.. Maybe there are stories in everything, secrets in places untold.. Racism doesn't take affect in that piano that Johnny plays for fun.. No killings, bleeding willing, no tears and no places to run.. But one day Johnny lost his interest in that piano he owned.. Black and white stopped playing together, no teamwork was shown.. Dust piled on top of those racial ridden people of music.. They didn't want to stop playing, they know they did not choose it.. The keys starting fight, black against white, white against black.. For as soon as no one noticed them, the racial feelings were back.. In a way, this piano relates to life, a lesson you cannot learn from a book.. Racism is not a problem of reason, if no one is there to look.. |
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12-08-04, 12:02 AM
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IP: 283B 08F8
Replies please...
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12-08-04, 10:00 PM
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IP: 283B 08F8
Bump
Bring up my post |
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12-09-04, 01:39 PM
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IP: 28AD 5545
I responded to another piece of your poetry before... you have a nice way with words.. and the flow of this piece was on point and kinda blunt.. more of a straight forward piece.. i made a poem called My Piano a while back, and i mentioned ebony and ivory as metaphors, when i seen these lines:
"Can black and white really work like that? Or is this just a fake?".. "For living where I grow up, a piano and people can't relate".. For his own sake he debated with himself over this reason for days.. Black and white keys working together? He was just so amazed.. ^i went back for a moment on my piece.. i'm kinda shocked that no one has responded to this.. i was feeling it fa real.. stay up.. Lady Fiya
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12-09-04, 10:54 PM
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IP: 283B 08F8
Reply finally. Thank you
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12-10-04, 01:06 PM
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Odi et Amo
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IP: CDF2 4A2E
Concept was original and it's nice to read something like this for a change. Vocab was suited for the subject, right to the point. Had some wonderful wordplay in there. I love how you can say certain things without over-doing it...keep on dropping your poetry because i enjoy reading it! Nice drop!
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12-10-04, 08:00 PM
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IP: 283B 08F8
Thank you.
I will have my next piece up soon |
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12-15-04, 09:48 PM
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FuCk YoU I RhYme BeTtEr
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IP: 21E1 08CC
chea mayn...tight shit...creative as well...like lady fiya said you have a good way with words...keep them coming mayne...9/10...~1~
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