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Old 01-25-05, 09:30 PM   #1
encrypted7
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my mental capacity is Like
E= the speed of light
speak or type
beef or bite
atoms get smashed
whether we shoot or fight
fuk a punchline
you know tha rules
its do till i die
you want to be comic
muthafuka you better sit tight
fa real you better off signin up for tha comic view
cuz fukin wit me
it strip down to ya birthday suit
i want cheeda cheese like big poppa
So give me tha loot
yo watch and yo chain
we loot and wait on tha stoop
(Gangsta)
yeah youngin i spit
saliva touch ya
leave you cold quick
walking tha ave
ignant like you a older bitch
20 minutes fa $5
just tryin ta find tha magic stix
ya crew roll around
damn my mans had a cervix
you better swerve
swift
before i make the earth shift
ya peak tip
bay bay and the kids
followIn tha drip
you get clipped
hole in ya face you just cant sip
wishin ta god
that you could go get a face lift
this aint kanye west
more like witches of eastwick
leave you C-sick
cranberry vomit
somebody help shit

Last edited by encrypted7 : 01-25-05 at 09:34 PM.
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Old 01-25-05, 11:17 PM   #2
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um wtf is this....? half of it flows so good it dont flow right...wtf....i aint even gonna start on this
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Old 01-26-05, 01:14 AM   #3
Ysdat
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I would class this as ok.
To make this good, all you have to do is stretch your bars out.

for instance:


you muther fuckers better know my mental capacity is Like
science
I split the atom, i figured E= the speed of light
everytime im in the room,your scared to speak or type
so fake you kick back and just beef or bite
Im a human bomb,so watch your atoms get smashed
Im gonna win whether we shoot or fight
I spit raw and real,fuk a punchline
I break them,while you know tha rules
hip is in my heart,its do till i die
your rhymes are funny,like you want to be comic

feel me?
You have to fill your bars out more, so it actually makes sense.
keep dropping.return the feed.
check
~inside the brain of a maniac~
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