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01-25-05, 09:52 PM
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I live (Exclusively For RV)
IP: 28AD 5545
Yo This is sort of a Nas "live now" type flow..but yo must stop at (...)'s
it flows right,but This isn't really a topic...Its just my feelings today.. Ventilated into rap,I didn't try for vocab at all..so don't quote on that.. I'm just realy losing enthusiasm for life right now. __________________________________________________ ____________ I Live As I stand In...between the intercetion...of our lives.. I realise... we aren't making progression of our time.. We...just live for the future..as Our moments are wasted.. being ants instead of grasshoppers..and I know this is nature Packing College degress,for careers you'll never see.. using punctuation for lettering,wasting precious time to better me.. Yes.. I'm on a rapsite..and Yes this won't land me a deal.. but oviously this does something for me,if I'm standing here still.. nobody gets I wanna dropout,hell If I care bout being locked out.. but I'm being abused,veiwing live,through my eyes seeing knockouts.. While I can be elsewhere...even the devil knows its hell here.. I'm happier at school,this spot on the stairs is where I felt tears.. this dent on the wall is where I fell here,this black eye I've got.. Be sure there wasn't a belt here..I feel this is making life worse.. for everyone around.......me,they see..my complaining although I hope they don't hate me..I've been droopy eyed lately.. My face isn't changing,jus yesterdays tracing,in other cases.. I've got myself an April..my girl not the month,now the world is much less.. drama and depressing as it was before..but I fear god will take her.. so I can suffer more...and for..reason I have yet to understand.. How can I move foward..If I'm punched when I advance.. no lunch on my demands,nor any money,despite the cuts along my pants.. I'm not the one to worry,about brandnames,and fanbase.. I don't got plenty clothes,but I got clothes,there's nothing I can hate.. I can admit,seeing niggas,at leas,getting an outfit every week.. make me feel little,although I never speak..you can't attempt.. to Edit me,my personality occured of time,although the curse isn't mine.. It has been others having worse in there lives,I see I'm rambling.. about feelings,bu don't Panick I'm not finshed,I'm just damaged.. too of sickness...mentally with living..My oppinions give niggas shivers.. I no longer in it timid..I replinish every lyrics,liek spilling every drop of blood.. with a raindrop clear tear,splashin to top it up..raymel seem concerned.. even ask if I eat at home,I told him no,but I often find peace alone.. Freddy and his mockery,dishonors me it got me..he told me.. I'll be a nigga on the streets,told me I'd regret it,and I just neglect it.. who knew untill this day these words I never forget it..played back.. why'd he have to say that..my brainwaves,just play that tape back.. and it leaves me worried..and it even hurts me..and leaves me cursing.. what if he right,my sophmore year emergin..what I I try?.. I think but I just quit and stick to the 1st thing..hiphop habits are lurking.. call it a distraction..and say all this is isn't magic..tell me.. 50's magic stick isn't plastic..tell me..If I'm wrong for my way of life.. tell me if I'ma pay the price..then you'll say what I swear I heard my reflection say tonight... I've cleared it all out,I've spilled my guts.. I won't clean em up...but I'll still be cut..whether this intrested you.. or if it filled you up..something beckoned you..I only have this.. believe me the rest I lose..thank you for being my company.. I now have respect for you.. Bridge/ Don't waste time planning,you'll miss your chances.. just like I just did.. (sigh) IF I don't provide mansions,don't comment on my antics.. must be my dibs..I will.. (sigh) -peace- http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=167449 http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=172967
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01-25-05, 10:05 PM
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FuxJustAWord
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IP: 3B27 2020
finally someone who rhymed there story.......... this'll show Soc!!
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01-25-05, 10:56 PM
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IP: 5043 32F4
you said you didnt go for vocab but you had some pretty decent vocab nothing new but some alright vocab but yea it dos flow to it good....worked for me....but shit the emotion was good and so was the creativty and then the imagery was very nice also one of the best peices i seen all weak to be honest....the stucture might have not beed so great but it flowed to a damn beat and most OM's people jsut write to a thign and say it flowes but this dos flow..good peice...
yo deph check my OM Until The End... |
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01-26-05, 01:22 AM
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Whys That?
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IP: AA11 D51C
You have left me speachless fam.
This is too dope for text. And thats on the real. Download c/edit. and bring this shit to the world.Well to your local first.lol. This is all round deep,dope and emotional.*wipes tear from his eye*. Yeh tc dope. |
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01-26-05, 01:29 AM
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Play Nice or Play Dead
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IP: 3240 794D
Yo, this was really nice. Plenty of good vocab in this one. Took me a second to read it though. Feelin it..specially this part
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some realness. and yeah, I'd like to hear this in audio form as well. Keep it up.
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01-27-05, 08:15 PM
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ready 4 wuteva
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IP: FD3A AEA9
dis dat real shit mayne. u said it was a nas type flow n 2 me it seemed like it flowed well with dis song off tha cd he made after STILLMATIC called "mastermind". it was said before but i've gotta repeat it dawg. too hot for text. you gotta do a audio on this for us mayne. it's few cats on RV at this level. vocab was excellent but you kinda shot it down with ya explanation at tha beginning that you wasn't tryin much on it. i still give it a 9/10 tho. rtf in my freestyle.1.
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01-28-05, 03:19 AM
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Whys That?
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IP: 4610 C58E
no This cant be it!!.
I have just relised what this is. this is your farwell peice we talked about. Honestly man, we gone be in touch again. i know it. if you do happen to come back and read this get at me. For real get at me.I aint fucking with you indeph, get at me!!now.
~peace deph~Last edited by "fi-del" : 01-28-05 at 03:23 AM. |
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01-28-05, 12:46 PM
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IP: 34D2 D886
Indeph this was a very touching open mic, your vocab was very strong even tho u weren't tryna put it out there.. you did a good job, this is truly one of the realest piece of work i have seen on RV in a long time.. if u leaving, then i'm sorry to see u go.. i wish the best for you. DO NOT give up on ya dream, if u need to hit me up, you still can--I remember u called me the Femcee on here that actually cares about the well-being of others despite the beef lol, I'll never change..
 if u stop by again, we'll have to do a collab.. 
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01-28-05, 09:53 PM
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Banned: Cheating
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IP: 5043 32F4
i jsut realized it lol......i thought it was a joke....but deph told me to UP it for him so iam...
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01-28-05, 10:11 PM
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Banned: Cheating
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IP: 8A1A D0A3
pretty nice dawg
keep it up |
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01-29-05, 04:18 PM
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IP: 3240 794D
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01-29-05, 05:28 PM
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23-7, 16 Knockouts
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IP: 3240 794D
this was sick homie, good work!
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01-29-05, 06:20 PM
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Rastafari Walk Tall
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IP: F2EA D335
.............might vote this open mic of the month.................
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01-29-05, 08:29 PM
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IP: 0825 899A
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01-29-05, 09:13 PM
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IP: C516 D54A
Dis seemed like a farewell song,especially da last few bars
If you leave,good luck man.Nice one
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