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02-22-05, 06:30 PM
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Love Will Find Me
IP: 36EF FE17
Love? How can you give something you never had.
To me it creates nothing but pain and that drives me mad. BUT really I'm the one in love and it is hurting so bad. Who do I love, Who do I hate? Trying with all I got to say to hell with thy soul mate. Not known nor seen. Why is it so great? To know that I'm young I still gotta try. Why am I feeling this way? Why? I can't spill my feelings yet I can still cry. Constantly this feeling love is haunting me. I can't get love so why should I give it? I know nothing of my life, so why do I live it? My love ends up in a disaster. But when she walks by my heart just starts beating faster. It's to a point where my heart is my own and keep it and live out my life alone. Sometimes I thought she understood. She should know that I'm heart broken for good. Yet you never see me leanig towards violence. For ever I shall keep my feelings and what I got to say unsilenced. Never came to mind I'll stay off them drugs. Then maybe one day I won't find love. Love will find me. GREAT JOB, FEATURED POEM THIS WEEK~Fluid
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02-23-05, 01:39 AM
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IP: 3DE7 FE4B
Another wonderful poem that sends a good vibe out,plus this seems like something that came deep from inside of you or just some feelings preserved.
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02-23-05, 09:48 AM
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good poem u went all out on this piece nice structure, great vocab, & a few metaphors i would it an overall quality 9.5/10
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02-26-05, 07:38 PM
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IP: CE59 2B07
uppyn thy shyt.....
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02-27-05, 02:38 AM
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This Was Alright Man, Not As Good As Your Other Now, This Piece Was Descriptive But, Just A Little And You Have Bin Usuing The Same Vocabulary As You Usualy Use Man, Try And Change That A Little Alright?......8/10 |
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02-27-05, 09:07 PM
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IP: 2D55 810C
Uppyn thys piece.....
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03-01-05, 07:36 PM
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IP: 0825 899A
once again, nice job, this poem will be featured, keep dropping man..1
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03-01-05, 07:39 PM
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I walk & walk over you
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IP: 7D2E A13E
Good ish...
Emotion was good. Upp ya vocab fam......Flowed nicly. Try not to stretch your lines. Add some meta'z......... either way good piece.
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03-01-05, 07:43 PM
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IP: D2E3 43E1
This isn't my best drop. I say Desire is my best drop ever.
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03-01-05, 07:45 PM
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I walk & walk over you
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IP: 422F 91E7
word to that fam...........EH YO CAN YOU LEAVE A FEEDBACK IN MY LATEST DROP
"MEN CRY"
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03-01-05, 09:15 PM
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IP: CF4E 8780
def feel'n that it was smooth ...i tend to stay away from rhym'n alot cuz alot of my stuff are jus song lyrics.. but still i liked ur flow on it. nice drop ...it was good i like it when u can feel the emotion in a piece.....keep em com'n ..
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03-02-05, 12:25 PM
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IP: D38E 499D
Twas nice...sort of simplistic though
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03-06-05, 07:35 AM
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Odi et Amo
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IP: 3A91 89A1
Liking this piece, kept it quite simple but that's part of the beauty because it makes the reader focus on the raw emotion in this poem. I love the concept of "love will find me" and such, you portrayed it quite well. Not your best drop like you said but still enjoyed reading it, keep on dropping!
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03-07-05, 04:05 AM
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IP: 0825 899A
its cool man ya no im gonna give you props on it all
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