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03-03-05, 02:54 PM
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Watching Life Slip away
IP: 0DD2 7DAA
I wouldn’t know were to begin
I don’t see why people would really care, they’d just stop stand and stare they walk around in there everyday lives not thinking about people who have to put up a fight I need to find a escape from this place feel loved and needed held tight in someone’s embrace the love I once felt for another died when I lost them as I held my baby in my arms felt new you no. The proud mum after that’s second the worst was still to come letting go of my babies hand watching him slip away was like watching writing fade away in the sand This is the hardest goodbye id ever have to make Don’t worry Connor mummy’s coming, just a little late laying my baby down to sleep I felt my heart break and I started to weep I lay there alone looking to your cot knowing you should be there, but Connor your not don’t worry baby mummy will never forget the way she felt on the day we first met! |
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03-03-05, 05:33 PM
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IP: 8AB2 5BB6
i like this alot you write how i write... very nice.. ppl will prolly bitch bout ur structure and shit but i like this drop.. honesty in a drop is key.. and you have alot here... check out some of my stuff some time.. o yea where is runcorn?.. i have alot of friends in earls terrace.. o yea keep dropp'n
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03-03-05, 05:54 PM
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IP: 0DD2 7DAA
hey runcorns about 20 miles out side liverpool
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03-03-05, 07:51 PM
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IP: CF4E 8780
sweetness hey stay active on the site we could use more poets...u like the killers?
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03-05-05, 10:39 AM
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IP: 0DD2 7DAA
yeah there not 2 bad...
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03-06-05, 06:46 AM
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Odi et Amo
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IP: 3A91 89A1
I need to find a escape from this place
feel loved and needed held tight in someone’s embrace the love I once felt for another died when I lost them as I held my baby in my arms felt new you no. The proud mum ^Loving this part Strongest aspect of your piece is the emotion, so pure and raw, like you spit it straight from the core based on own life experience. You picture it with such a sense of reality that it's easy for people to relate to. Found a good balance with your vocab, not too basic but not too complex either. Your structure creates a bit of confusion which I liked in fact. Keep on dropping girl and please return the favor on one of my poems. Thanks! Europe represents  DQ
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