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Old 03-28-05, 05:18 AM   #1
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Remember The name (acuity Diss)

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Link 1:http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=183746 <d-thug
Link 2:http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=183827 <s.p.l

yeh man its here.... 3 minuts of solid dissin i wouldav uploaded it last night but soundclick was being gay... has improved alot since "butterflies" i hope.. yeh anyway here it is..

"Remember The name (acuity diss)"

http://www.soundclick.com/bands/3/e...ctionsmusic.htm

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Old 03-28-05, 12:59 PM   #2
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ehhhhh....needed emotion and u need to rework your flow but it was aight
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Old 03-28-05, 11:23 PM   #3
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you wait way too long to start spitting, your flow is choppy in the beginning, then it gets real simple, quality is hurt badly, when you say "This is my 3rd Audio" ... u didn't have to tell us we knew just keep working, cuz its rough on all edges right now, if I was battling you I'd have alot of shit to work with after this track. peesh
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Old 03-29-05, 03:58 AM   #4
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thnx for the feed.... upiinnn for more
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Old 03-29-05, 09:18 PM   #5
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Congratulations! You are the first emcee to receive critique using Q's newly developed Elaborate-Breakdown System.

How did I listen to this track?
Headphones or Speakers: I listened through speakers w/subwoofer

1-10 (10 being the highest)
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Flow: (fluidity/complexity/originality): 6


Rhyming: (Multies/complexity/appeal): 6


Lyrics: (Originality/creativity/complexity): 6



Energy: (intensity/focus): 5



Delivery: (Rhythm/creativity/efficiency): 4

50 pts. maximum>>>>>>Your Score:_____27_______
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Beat selection: decent beat


The Good: the beat, your voice, some lyrics


The bad: your delivery


The ugly: vocal quality


Final Word: this track was lackluster at best because your delivery

is monotone...Plus, your quality took away from the listening

enjoyment


Recommendations: Work on vocal quality...make them more

crisp...use more inflections in your voice.



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A = 50-40
B = 39-30
C = 29-20
D = 10-19
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Old 03-30-05, 06:59 AM   #6
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hahah yeh thnx q i really appriciatwe this... hav u got a link then send it here n ill rtf man thnx
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Old 03-30-05, 10:13 AM   #7
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Listening: Beat aight flow is dut dut dut dut dut dut slow it flows but not the type i properly feel getsd better as you go on... punches aight personals again aight average though...quality i won't comment on coz lo-fi is deceptive... but it's aight as a track you sound monotone work on that it's early days emotion is REAL important and it lacks here which does effect the song...more emotion = perhaps more listenable but u'll get there.

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Old 03-31-05, 03:42 AM   #8
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ight thnx for the feed favour returned uppinnnnn
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