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Old 04-01-05, 01:23 PM   #1
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I'm feeling alienated, basically trapped inside a life
Of daily hating between the blacks and the whites
With races at a standstill rather than in a run ahead
No love, just a nation blaming eachother instead
Ordinarily I would of gave up, fuck all the bullshit
But making a change seemed more benificial than to quit
I'm staring out at this world, its a cold place to live
People seem to thrive on revenge rather than forgive
Can't rely on someone else to see that you survive
Dying sometimes seems easier than being alive
I trust few, most friends are foes in desquise
With hatred hidden behind thier phony smile
Look at thier eyes to decide, the eyes never lie
A window to thier mind you can read whats behind
You'll be suprised what you find, trapped and confined
You were blind to thier true feelings of malign

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Old 04-01-05, 03:11 PM   #2
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Hm... This was a pretty decent drop
Structure was okay ,
Wordplay was okay , could have been better...
Concept was good ... i like the refferance to racism ..
Overall keep it up . you had a nice drop .. good topic
hope to see another drop from you .. 7.5/10
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Old 04-01-05, 03:27 PM   #3
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I understood dat perfectly...I had no questions bout "what did dat mean"
I can relate to all da linez in dat piece

Nice job,Origin
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Old 04-01-05, 05:07 PM   #4
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decent drop feelin this shit but like bone said
fix ya wordplay shortin your lines an it ill flow a lot better
over 7/10just cuz it was only 16bars..........CB83holla
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