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Old 04-11-05, 07:03 PM   #1
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Emotion

i need something to write about.
this writers block is plaguing me
the words just leave when i speak
your note is filled with subtle pleas
inspire me to create and love
i'll contemplate and over react
and in the end just to come clean
i forgot to call but i swear i love you,
damn it , you know what i mean
i don't really mean that, its just
there's something in your laugh
i'll reassure you , don't hold back
give you confidence where you lack
looking for the honesty in your eyes
i'll see more than what i expected
if you want me to i'll sweep you off your feet
pack tightly just to explain
repeat the words again
will you be mine?all i can convey
your eyes follow as...
as my hand grazes your face
i enlist all my courage for what it is
living in this moment
sheltered from the high tide
coming from what i witnessed
it will take more this time
as my eyes fall from yours
every dream in my soul
this for you i present this my...

Honesty



I KEPT THIS POEM SIMPLE...VOCAB INCLUDED...o yea lol check out my free writes to lol
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Old 04-11-05, 07:07 PM   #2
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its not all together, but i seee the point your trying to make. Keep up the good work and read my song "Barbie Doll"
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Old 04-11-05, 08:24 PM   #3
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So this is just random thought's made into a poem.. I didn't see like, what you were tryin' to stay. Try to be more complex and you need to work on your vocab. Over all is was an okay drop.. 6/10
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Old 04-11-05, 08:52 PM   #4
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lol i kept the vocab simple on this one...ppl don't understand the big words lol but thanks
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