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how can u confess ur depression to others
if you cant admit it to yourself the acceptance of myself flees everytime im close to grasping it the words are soundless but the thoughts scream a battle from side to side is it true or just a fleeting feeling? when trial day comes the mirror is the door guilty or not guilty the refection as my judge and suddenly the verdict seems clear and the tears, placid fall fast and sudden making pools in my palms in which i catch them in puddles of truth and windows to my soul i throw the tears at the mirror and the pane of glass ripples with purity for the tears are the absolute truth of what my fate holds |
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wow.... that was deep... well written... i was feelin it the whole way through
i throw the tears at the mirror and the pane of glass ripples with purity for the tears are the absolute truth of what my fate holds i can find really a lot of truth in what you are saying... and really connected sum feelings w/ these words... great drop~Peace |
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thanks leah... dammit people, just because it doesnt rime doesnt mean u need to sleep on it..please...
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well i see u r still preaching truth & pure emotions my fellow poet/
outstanding poem/ more than well felt/ preach on gifted 1........ muchluv&respect
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very good piece monkey...deep...well put...it takes talent to execute such a style in a good way...but you did it....
... - searching deep within yourself for answers and ultimately..the truth...but everytime you come close...something seems to block it...but gradually you find new ways...and you begin to come to realisation of what it is you must do...you find some of the answers you seek...but you do not like it and the 'truth' hurts....but this opening of emotions within...has made you realise, roughly your path of fate... - or something along those lines.. .it had one or two levels to it....but one stuck out....a very deep piece monkey..actually one of my faves from you...people need to read this piece...as it is just so good...vivid imagery too...and some great metaphors and analogies used as well.... ...respect..... |
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blackmoon: thanks for the reply... im glad u love my peices so much... cuz i respect you has a poet... thanks... love to ya
varentao: thanks for the reply... i thought i did alright with this peice... but what i can see that u saw what i was sayin... its tru that whenever u get close to figuring urself or sumthing out, something is there to block that final thought... but thanks again and love to ya |
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