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Old 08-18-05, 07:32 AM   #1
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Empty Path

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Another story/song OM


Born straight in to the hood, growing up in the ghetto
A selfish wife and screaming kid,im just wanting to settle
Raps the only thing I’ve got,your passion of last resort
Im there listen to Immortal Technique,telling you that life is short
I’ve seen my dad die all due to his pride of patriotism
One brother 6 foot under, another ones in the prision
Moms sat at home,believing everything she hears from the tv set
But the only thing she understands, she the Alqaeda bomb threat

Finally we rise, looking up to the sky,
But we can never follow..... an empty path
So you sit writing your rhymes, not liking this time,
Coz we can never follow.... an empty path,


So the next day,hope all be good,this is what tomorrow has to bring
All blur,hear shouting,feel the bang of which is her wedding ring
Now I can feel your heart shatter into pieces,abused in a marriage
What’ve I done wrong? When she spits out something about a miscarriage
If a day can start like this, then how is my life going to get better
Go back to my bedroom were I pull out my first wrote love letter
Think these were the days when my love was always on my mind
Days when my love was confined to 1 girl, instead of all mankind

Finally we rise, looking up to the sky,
But we can never follow..... an empty path
So you sit writing your rhymes, not liking this time,
Coz we can never follow.... an empty path,



Remembering all my thoughts,all my plans,all now just a dream
Fallen to a fake idea which is portrayed on all earths screens
That this moment in time you look for answers,so you turn to Christ
I would have said it all seems darkness from here,but all I see is white
I’m just sat there praying,thoughts of a 2pac’s saying,mingle in my mind
‘SHUD I BLAST MY SELF’, I’ve gone to far so this is the end of my line
Sorry God, my wife and child, please may you have mercy upon my soul
Fall to the floor,1 blast, curl up, this is my end once my own heart turns cold
I had no aim to head for, so my choice in my in life were very vivid
Because I’ll be looking over you everyday to help y’all live though it

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Old 08-18-05, 07:46 AM   #2
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this was a nice piece...you used good imagery and your ability to tell the story was real nice....keep it up and keep dropping......
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Old 08-18-05, 07:48 AM   #3
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thanx hun always nice to see feed from you
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Old 08-18-05, 08:12 AM   #4
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Ya This Was Real Tight i Love The Emotion In The Story Nice Imagery Could Have Had Better Vocab But I Think Its Better When You Rap How You Talk And not Try To Use Real Big Words Just To Impress Everyone

So Good Job On This
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Old 08-18-05, 11:22 AM   #5
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ahem... yeh i did the hook aswel..
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Old 08-18-05, 01:04 PM   #6
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o ye sori i forgot to put that!!!! my bad
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Old 08-18-05, 01:13 PM   #7
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this was hot, ure story tellin skillz has skyroceted......this was great...emotion...lyrics...all there...potentially OM of the week.....9/10
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Old 08-18-05, 01:14 PM   #8
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dawg there aint no OM of the Week..........but thanx
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Old 08-18-05, 04:48 PM   #9
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uppining!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Old 08-18-05, 08:42 PM   #10
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what is this......... #3 OM this week?
MK takin over the OM's


as usual MK drops some hot storytelling shit! great imagination..... story flowed good, verse flowed good..... the quality of vocab and lyrics was great!

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Old 08-18-05, 08:45 PM   #11
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yep thats 3 OMs this week.....im well happy with my self and ive got one more tomorrow,a collab with EC!!!
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Old 08-18-05, 09:37 PM   #12
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Lmao. Taking it over, just like maddrapper.

Okay, truthfully, penis. On the left hand, penis. In the right hand, penis. This verse was the center equivalent of double-hand jacking off as your wife mows the lawn in her underwear. I had to put on shoes so that I didn't phase through the ground like supergirl as I read this acroynm-filled newspaper. The emotion was there like a reliable celery stalker, and the story-telling was a series of unfortunate events, minus the 'un' the 'events', the 'series', and the 'fortunate' ,just leaving was of. That's all I can say to this true dizzydope fruit cola.

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Old 08-18-05, 09:39 PM   #13
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LMAO thanx i guess
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Old 08-18-05, 09:40 PM   #14
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I think you know.
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Old 08-18-05, 09:42 PM   #15
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hey, this was a good piece very good imagery, told the story welll vocab and multis was iight structure was good, i got a good flow off of it ......yea nice piece 9/10....keep it up cant wait for that collab
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