this was a verse i did for a topical battle on anutha site......just lookin for some feed......

Rain falling, I’m sitting here recalling, a life so appalling
Cellphone ringing, leaves me wondering if deaths finally calling
Sun shining, still I don’t feel like smiling, remember that time
You reminded me I was worthless, nothing, it was October ‘99

That day it was cloudy, I pulled up in my ride, quite contented
Checked my hair, looking good, always said I was well-presented
Thought you meant it, walked up to the door, there’s no key needed
Find my fam on the floor, pleading for help but you still proceeded

Couldn’t figure out what was going on, my husband and my brother
I shouted stop, you said WHAT i’ve already killed your mother
Your eyes were raging, nowhere to go the street became my protection
With no affection, in every homeless person I saw my reflection

Now I’m reminiscing, I have no good memories to recollect
Everything wrecked, for you I could never have any respect
Surprised I’ve stayed alive a month more, but now I’m finished
And with this knife, I ensure my life’s bout to be diminished

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any feed lol???

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Meh...it was ok...Nothing special...ok topic, but a little played...But you did a really good job expressing your thoughts and getting your point across, which I must give you props for...Overall, probably a 7.3-7.6/10...1

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^^^^oooooookkkkkkkkkkk not played newayz as alwayz mizz fyre a good piece not one of your best ones but it was str8 vocab good flow was good everything was good i like readin your stuff cus unlike sum ppl on dis site you actually got talent we should hook up wit a collab 8.5/10

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^^^lol thanx........yeh holla at me wit a topic...........

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i liked it .. the opener was a little eh but it was a nice piece over all you did a good job conveying the emotion ... but yea it wasnt ur best piece .. but i still liked it . just because it had a good feeling/vibe to it... i liked the imagery

7.5/10

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