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8-10 Lines
No Crew Votes
No Recycling
No Biting
No Hate
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Check in by: 08-16-05 at 02:05 PM

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C_R_E_A_M has ACCEPTED this battle on 08-16-05 01:41 PM.

Drakel has ACCEPTED this battle on 08-16-05 01:45 PM.

Look man,i guess imma have ta hurt-dis-cat...
he Sweet,claimen he nice wit his hershey-raps...

u gonna merk-me-scrap? thats a big step-u-taken...
cuz u couldnt Exhale Heat even after the Breathes-u-taken...

pls...i rip cats like u,without even Thinken-Of-Scripts...
beef? i'll put Damu'z(bloods) on ya head like u was Creepin-wit-Crips....

and i know Drakel aint Keepin-Da-Clips,he to scared ta Beef-Wit-My-Click....
so i'll stuff da Mic In Ya Mouth so u can't Speak-Wit-Ya-Lips...

U Punk Son-Of-A-Bitch!!!!

**don't take it personal its just hip-hop

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who the hell are you? seems nothing but a bitch, ya?
cause when i say you're whack as fuck, no, i aint playin witcha
sure i guess you're not that bad, if you dont mind gas leaks
cause you'll never 'C' win.........like blind athletes
this shit is always losing, man, he never stops
and this bitch thinks he's hard...nah, cream is soft
i know you're a total wreck, but you think you can mess with this?
im plungin ya into a deep sleep....just so you can rest in piss
put some lotion on my hands, nah fag, this isn't your dreams
just to make it official, my punches leavin you creamed
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1. user title
2. easy
3. think of real cream
4. plunge into a deep sleep = kill, lmlo......from his sig
5. should be easy

for all you n00bs who don't like to get things

gl

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Voted For: Drakel

CREAM:

Punches: Blah they were decent at best. Nothing really hit very hard man. Multies do not make a good battle, punches and personals do.

Personals: Didnt see any personals either. Try being creative, throwing in a few plays on his name or something...

Wordplay: Hershey's line was played as fuck...Elevate.

Flow: The only thing you did right, but there was one stretched bar.

Drakel:

Punches: Real good. Made me laugh, creative, consistent, and strong. Nice job here.

Personals: Good plays off his name, although some were a little simple. I feel you could've came up with something better, but you still had personals, and he didnt.

Wordplay: Good, good. Nothing played, which is always a plus.

Flow: Nothing wrong here.

V/ Drakel

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HoLo

Look man,i guess imma have ta hurt-dis-cat...
he Sweet,claimen he nice wit his hershey-raps...
4/5-Nice opener coulda came harder
u gonna merk-me-scrap? thats a big step-u-taken...
cuz u couldnt Exhale Heat even after the Breathes-u-taken...
4/5-I liked the 2nd line it was pretty nice
pls...i rip cats like u,without even Thinken-Of-Scripts...
beef? i'll put Damu'z(bloods) on ya head like u was Creepin-wit-Crips....
5/5-Best line ya had
and i know Drakel aint Keepin-Da-Clips,he to scared ta Beef-Wit-My-Click....
so i'll stuff da Mic In Ya Mouth so u can't Speak-Wit-Ya-Lips...
4/5-Nice closer

Overall:17/20
Feedback:Multis throughout the whole verse, a good drop your structure was off a little bit but it didnt really effect the flow of ya shit nice drop man

Drakel

who the hell are you? seems nothing but a bitch, ya?
cause when i say you're whack as fuck, no, i aint playin witcha
3/5-Coulda came harder with that opened but not to bad
sure i guess you're not that bad, if you dont mind gas leaks
cause you'll never 'C' win.........like blind athletes
4/5-your best verse, you coulda came harder but not to bad
this shit is always losing, man, he never stops
and this bitch thinks he's hard...nah, cream is soft
3/5-coulda came harder..all i can say
i know you're a total wreck, but you think you can mess with this?
im plungin ya into a deep sleep....just so you can rest in piss
2/5-didnt really get that.....rest in piss? seems like you forced that rhyme
put some lotion on my hands, nah fag, this isn't your dreams
just to make it official, my punches leavin you creamed
4/5-A decent closer wanna your better lines

Overall:16/25
Feedback:kinda weak, wasn't really a bad drop but you need to elevate bub

Vote: HoLo/C_R_E_A_M
Reason:Came a lot harder...had multis, a better rhyme structure, better punches

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Voted For: Drakel

LoL@ this battle

who the hell are you? seems nothing but a bitch, ya?
cause when i say you're whack as fuck, no, i aint playin witcha
^^Lmao..good play off user title...8/10
sure i guess you're not that bad, if you dont mind gas leaks
cause you'll never 'C' win.........like blind athletes
^^hmm...Ok....6/10
this shit is always losing, man, he never stops
and this bitch thinks he's hard...nah, cream is soft
^^uncreative bar right here....4/10
i know you're a total wreck, but you think you can mess with this?
im plungin ya into a deep sleep....just so you can rest in piss
^^ok play of sig....5/10
put some lotion on my hands, nah fag, this isn't your dreams
just to make it official, my punches leavin you creamed
^^OK....6/10

Ok...had some decent punches.Best one was the 1st bar..the play of the user title.The punch that didn't hit was the 2nd bar.Just seemed to uncreative.When you look at his name..that's like the 1st thing you think off.But overrall..ite verse.

Look man,i guess imma have ta hurt-dis-cat...
he Sweet,claimen he nice wit his hershey-raps...
^^MY goodness.this was the most forced multi I ever seen...2/10
u gonna merk-me-scrap? thats a big step-u-taken...
cuz u couldnt Exhale Heat even after the Breathes-u-taken...
^^why did you have hypens in the make me scrap part?..2/10
pls...i rip cats like u,without even Thinken-Of-Scripts...
beef? i'll put Damu'z(bloods) on ya head like u was Creepin-wit-Crips....
^^weak as fuck...3/10
and i know Drakel aint Keepin-Da-Clips,he to scared ta Beef-Wit-My-Click....
so i'll stuff da Mic In Ya Mouth so u can't Speak-Wit-Ya-Lips...
^^are you even with a crew?..and played punch..3/10

OK...My first advice..leave multis alone.It ain't workin for you.They were as forced as it can get.And stop with the hypens.U don't need it.As for your structure..fix it so that it's normal.

Vote-Drakel
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meh, wrote it in 10 min......you try being ridiculously creative

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