www.soundclick.com/Paranoid05

alright just recorded this, took a few hours to put together.

and leave links people.

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beats cool, smooth n shit... flow is way too robotic, extremely stoppy starty n u draggin sum words out fit lines in... delivery dont exist, cos ur emotion doesnt exist... lyrics are ok... its real borin to listen to, ur lackin confidence, u need to keep practicing build ur confidence n build up ur presence and charisma... peace

Choppy. Word your flow is crazy choppy. Try to work on your flow, because that was instantly the thing that stood out the most.
Beats ok, slow and what not, something I would listen to if I wanted to like, rest or something.
Prescence, in all honesty it sounds your just as bored as I am. It's all like "meh", your just falling asleep, and you rush in some parts, and slow down in some parts.
I did peep the lyrics and they wern't that bad at all, definetly the best part of your whole song.

No worries though, keep elevating.

thanks yall, yea i agree wit all the feed yall given me, but elevatin is real hard ay

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The beat reminds me of a song by Common. So the beat is dope and shit, but you sound like you're half asleep and just reading off a piece of paper. The lyrics are pretty good. For your hook, you should of had two different voices.

Voice 1: Is it really pain?

Voice 2: Of course it is man.

Word, all in all, not a bad track. I'd say re-record it and touch up how you sound when you're spitting. It just sounds really choppy.

Keep dropping them..

thanks man

uppin

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