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11-14-05, 03:57 PM
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The Paragraph President
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ayyo new shit from para....hot shit
IP: 8D1D 0114
"A Lyrical Universe"
www.soundclick.com/Paranoid05 Verse1: Paranoid Hook: Paranoid Verse2: Paranoid Verse3: Paranoid Mixing: Paranoid thanks for the looks, but i'ma give y'all a header. well some shit seems forced cuz i some what rushed it, i was thinkin bout re-recordin it but I dont feel like it anymore. I'll move on but yea 1 http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post2538721 http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post2538086
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11-14-05, 06:15 PM
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IP: 6AD2 8F43
Beats cool
Your voice is robotic..decent lyrics tho..but just seems like your reading your lyrics..deliverly isnt too good that needs improvement..flow is aight tho choppy in bits and falls off a few times..quality is meh Not bad track tho. keep at it |
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11-17-05, 09:12 PM
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The Paragraph President
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IP: 2372 BC06
thanks
upp
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11-17-05, 09:47 PM
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Seattle Hat Wit A Lean
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IP: BA87 A0AC
word yo
first things worst "Lyrical Universe?" lol sound kinda corny but word lets see... your voice do sound VERY robotic, not good. im not quite sure what can help you there, but word lol emotion kinda ehh, you still gotta work on that...it did get better as the track went on, but it still seem like you reading. flow is ok, it falls off here and there, but its ok lyrics is nice, but ye some lines is stretched i think my fav verse was second hook is kind aehh, like i said earlier..lyrical universe is kinda corny, so i found the hook kinda corny overall its ok, you gotta work on a few things though man. but you are getting better. hit me back famz
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11-18-05, 08:37 AM
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The Paragraph President
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IP: 2372 BC06
yea it does sound corny, I found that out once I just kept listening over and over to the hook, I do sound robotic ayy, its cool its just the effect I gave it I think. this wasn't my best at all it sounds bad.
wait for my new shit. upp
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