www.soundclick.com/paranoid05

verse1: diverged
hook: paranoid
verse2: paranoid
hook: paranoid

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http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=217961
http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post2594942

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Aight

Beats Koo...
1st Cat:
Shit...Flows Hot,Different

Dleiverys Koo I Like it

emotions Koo

Damn Lyrics Are nice

Aigth

Hooks Aight

Para:

Flows Better

Emotions Better Could Be Upped

Lyrics Are Nice...

Presence Is Improved

Deliverys Koo

Aight
Hook Again

Overall:
7/10

Your Improving...Koo Track

Please Rtf:http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=218338

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OYD MAFIA

dont try and be my friend fag.

uppin

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listenin..beat is nice..waitin for yall to come in....emotion is nice...flows very nice...gotta up the delivery tho..fell flow of once..hook is koo..jus with hooks u gotta rlly drive it..u wanna make it jump...u come in wit nice flow..need more energy n emotion..but thas it..flow is nice..i see ure workin on the articulation..nice...jus a lil robotic..nice..one

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www.soundclick.com/dollaback

shud def. be talkin durin that intro


1st cat...quality is decent...cud hear his HISS

flow is not bad

vocals could be amped some


flow gets choppy after a while

lyrics don't seem all that good


2nd cat...flow seems off beat to me

vocals could be amped

OH WAIT...that was the hook...wel, the hook is offbeat, IMO



Para...like ur voice...vocals need better editing...maybe dub ur verse

flow isn't bad there...not at all


decent track

needs polish tho
RTF please
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=218358

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Youtube Video for my song "CARRY ON"

Ok, firstly nice beat.

Diverged: flow was nice, lyrics were good, I actually got into it a bit (and I usually dont on RV audio's)

Hook: Was ok, the flow fell off in my eyes on the second bar. theme was ok though.

Para. Your lyrics wernt to bad man, and I havent really listened to anything else of yours but it sounds to me like you have the same problem I use too. I think you're trying to force your flow b/c you speed up and pause to wait or catch up to the beat in a few places.

Overall, production was done well. Mainly I'd just work out the few kinks yall have and you'd be good.

Peace.

Feed returned.

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Blow It - Topical

k...listening...

1st cat.....he's coo....voice is ok....lyrics are ok...but i dunno...for some reason i wasnt really feelin it...i think it got too repetitive after the first few bars....maybe switch flow a lil more..and change delivery up some throughout the verse...


hook..i dont really like...its seems too robot like...just let it flow...it seems like u take breaths between every syllable in it...just let it come out smooth man....it has potential to be a catchy lil hook....

verse...yea u def. improving man...flow has gotten better...lyrics are coo...delivery and mic presence has also gotten better...it seems like u getting a lil more comfy behind the mic...u still gotta work on your flow, delivery, and presence some....but its coming man...keep working.....itll be a matter of time...

ok verse....all i can tell u is to keep working hard at it....

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ok what was wit the laughing in beginning?......ok 1st dude quality need sum upping....opens decent delivery is somewhat forced....lyrics is jibberish from what I hear absolutely no point to them....flow was eh....decent.....hook....awwwwwww yall hurt track wit dat hook...I see what u was trying for but it aint work....2nd verse.....flow is choppy an mechinal sounding...too snare focused......lacks emotion...def need to improve rhythm of flow....an fluctuate vocal tone ALOT!!!!!!!!!!!more.......lyrically nothing spectacular but better than 1st......keep dropping an improving...no hate jus realness.

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wtf at that laugh lol : /
beat dont like it
flow is odd dont like ur voice llyrics are ok your flow reminds me of my little sisters cheers/patty cakes games lol
chorus yea no lol
paranoid luv the voice flow is improved emothion has gotten better lyrics were better that the 1st guys
overall cool track
hit me up for a collab paranoid

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beat aint 2 bad, first breh's quality could be better, his flow is aight, lyrics, not too sure what the point of them is if u feel me, hook is kinda meh, not diggin it and it sounds off somehow , like its not in time with th beat. 2nd MC is lyrically better, could up his quality too, flow is kinda shakey -on beat then off beat etc and soundin kinda forced n uncomfortable, delivery was decent. An aight track, just needs the quirks worked on and a some touchin up. 1

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listening:

LOL at the laugh! Beat is cool.1st person i like his flow and delivery.lyrics ok. presence is there! Hook is aight flow is abit off tho! Para, flow is meh and doesnt really fit which brings ya delivery. Presence is aight and lyrics are nice!

nice track!

hmmm....quality could b better i guess, the first dude fell off beat sometimes
the chours was very dry and off beat...
the seconed on kid seemed to be the brains of the song but punches made no real sense....off beat a lil

hmm maybe im to critical or not a nice guy but work harder n u will get better

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First Verse - Flow was solid. Lyrics could be upped tho.. i thought they were mad simple and bubble gummish.. except not so happy lol.. flow is solid tho... but lyrics i would definatly work on.. i would recommend actually writing your lyrics down while listening ot the beat on paper.. and then with the music off thinkf of lines to go in your verse, and then just fit em to the beat..

chorus - flow was off at the beggining.. then it setteled in..

second verse - flow was different ,, was a off snare completely.. maybe thats why i liked it.. i hate the snare.. im land my line where i want tolol.. thats how i feel.. but flow could have been a lil better..

overall not a terrible track.. but could use some touchin up..
not bad fellas.. keep droppin

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Proud OYD member again . <------- That is whassup

thanks for the feedback.

uppin

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