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Old 12-28-05, 09:20 AM   #1
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"The Lone Chair" ft. Imagine.Nation

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1st verse - Atticus
2nd Verse - Imagine.Nation

And there, where a kings hand
once thumbed death for instance,
heads once rolled, and man's cold
dammed the gifted... Is a hole.
The throne of a leader unjust
has grown ever green in disgust.
The peasant shoulders soldier
never more his tyrannical sword.
Passed to floor with a crash,
the gluttonous is fumbled back
and forth as... a crack forms.
His seat of glee and gluttony
no longer seen as just a seat,
As irony grips the kings stomach,
this fat fuck's consumed by a glutton.
And wow, its alittle odd now
how thow who opt. to sit on down
and be tugged up to your brick structure
turns to peasant without its structure.
His once throne holds it capture...
Throat open, see him trapped there.
As the King which mimicked hell,
sits sifting again in all our riches....
... But in the belly of this wishing well.


As I sit upon it, my thoughts come tracing the facts ,
Of how we loved our children but our children never loved us back
But the years went quickly by us, our children and you have gone,
I’m left with only memories, and this chair I sit upon
Saw my reflection in the mirror, almost broke down and cried,
So little hope that I'm alive, I wish that I had died
Feed me your lies, gazing across the table, open wide,
Though the weight of my heart is oppressive, not even the size
You know it's not coincidental that you’re lost, no trace
It’s dripping off of your face, and you’re losing your mind in this place
When a man loses his mate, many days are spent in years,
And without belief he knows his empty grief is a name for his own fears
It's hard enough being alone, sitting here quiet by the phone,
waiting for my memories to soften my mind, but they're hard as stone
Light threatens your soul, the way you see it when time has come,
though when you expire and arise, you feel nothing, your life is numb
Sitting here solely still, world is silent, but you go deaf,
because the sound of death is concealed, it closes your chest
It compresses your story, vanish to dust, it was never meant to be,
I've been sitting at a table with no one, for years the seat's been empty.

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Old 12-28-05, 01:33 PM   #2
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This piece was nice, good vocab and i liked your structure. i was reading it since the beginning and it got me hooked to read the rest. pretty good topic too. keep it up homie.
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Old 12-29-05, 08:33 AM   #3
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Thanks alot man. And damn, now I know what DQ was talking about when she told me the OM forum was fading away.

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Old 12-31-05, 12:12 AM   #4
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It's hella fading away... RV is fading away, and the OM mods do nothing to revive it

Anyways, dope collab. Atty you had the poetic vibe which is becoming more and more evident now adays, but it fits well. I liked your concept, nice play on the topic.

"As I sit upon it, my thoughts come tracing the facts ,
Of how we loved our children but our children never loved us back"
^ Dope opener & Favorite lines. flowed perfectly and set the scene just right. Never heard of you, but you're pretty good. Vocab was all in the right places.

Nice imagrey, both of you.

Keep it up atty.

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Old 12-31-05, 12:23 AM   #5
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woah this is pretty tight, first verse structure is reAlly short lol, like 5 words lines, first time seeing it, its like a hole hook verse u know, pretty dope tho, had fun readin it, second verse "Of how we loved our children but our children never loved us back" that was seriously dope man, i was feelin that line, true spittin, nice vocab too, structure is so so, overall this is a good collab, second dudes verse reminds me of my style of OM, we should collab, peace
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Old 12-31-05, 04:17 PM   #6
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^ He's on this site as Supsicious I think. But I'm not entirely sertain if that's the name... But he's deffinately on this site.
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Old 12-31-05, 08:53 PM   #7
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prettty cool collab ur on that poetry shit
collab was pretty cool both verse were very dif
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I'm Imagine.Nation!
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Old 01-04-06, 05:56 PM   #9
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^ Woooord, And i'm Atticus
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Old 01-04-06, 08:14 PM   #10
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ayo, this was cool, because i liked the endings...how the chair is just, empty, like a fading dream...you know? well, i hope you know...but seriously, it was cool, i enjoyed it, truly...passion and thought, both conductively aspired by each other, forming thought manipulations and provoking more intimate, insightful thought...which is dope, good job, keep dropping....if ANYONE, wants to collab, i'm usually bored, word
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Old 01-06-06, 01:35 PM   #11
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Ya I'd love to collab sometime. Just Pm me if you get a concept in mind or something.
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Old 01-06-06, 03:50 PM   #12
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Damn atty another one...i really like this drop..You had nice imagery in your peice very good emotions and feelings ....you had a pretty clever concept but i heard it once before..As for imagine. you also had a nice drop you could have come up with alittle better wordplay..but you had great imagery i was really feeling it you ...had a nice ending to it and it really concluded things overall nice drop. keep it up..

Maybe this could be in the HOF
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Old 01-06-06, 04:03 PM   #13
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Quote:
Originally Posted by Atticus
Ya I'd love to collab sometime. Just Pm me if you get a concept in mind or something.


not to be an ass, but doesn't this count as an 'up'?
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Old 01-07-06, 12:06 PM   #14
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*Shrug* I guess you could call it that... It sertainly wasnt intended to be an 'Up' though. I could careless if this falls to the bottom, I'll just write a new piece to take its place rather than hopelessly trying to jump start the dead. I was just telling you that I'd like to collab... My bad if thats somehow an 'Up'.
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Old 01-07-06, 02:44 PM   #15
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^ no no, nothing intended at you, that was aimed for bonecollector not doing his job and being a retard, you're good
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