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Old 03-03-03, 09:52 PM   #1
Truthful State
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In the Depths of my Eye

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You see me, look the other way & you don't/
Acknowledge my smile, but in other ways you won't/
You hold me, naturally I know your there/
Staring into ones eyes make me question how much you really care/
As time progresses I see your effortless ways/
The love I have for you has evolved, into a helpless gaze/
You've tainted my mind/
Robbed my godess of her fruit/
Wasted my time so I define you as thy blinded brute/
Bearing the fact that now you must leave, batters my heart for there is so much I want to give & recieve/
In a relationship I need affection/
But you couldn't possibly give with your life in the wrong direction/
I took a deep breath and gave you time/
While all along I saw our relationship dying/
I sacrificed my all, gave my mind & once I'm gone you'll soon realize that me, ya girl .......was one of a kind//

Let me know wha'chu think but please don't be brutal if the poem need be criticized

Last edited by Truthful State : 03-03-03 at 09:57 PM.
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