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words don't express..
IP: 0EAD DD5B
wrote this one tym hopefully it'll get some helpful crits.
my feelings for you strong, so un percieved you're that light on the flame hidden so deep.. without u im weak, honey my heart feels so lonely i wish you could swim in my sea and see what i see.. believe.. you're what i breathe what im here for, what i wake for each day.. promise me you'll stay and never betray your ways are engraved, on my heart a tattoo.. physically and mentally ill show love for you hold me in your arms, emotionlly subdued.. never confused never cold nor used without you i'm help-less almost incomplete as if i were a jigsaw u'd be my last piece.. words can't express what you mean to me. these words can't express what you mean to me... |
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IP: ABE5 5A5C
this wasnt bad..seems like words id
like hearin from my girl... it all flows alright but better read slowly to me but its your poem girl... not bad...check "for you" vvv http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=32925 |
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