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i need suggestions
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it's been awhile i've been in the lab now i'm ready to ~attack~
all you niggas on my list so start runnin like you on ~track~ cus i'ma have my ~pack~ with me so watch ya ~back~//1 you niggas thought i was hiddin think again i was ~trainin~ and ~regainin~ my strength preparin for the ~pain~ to comeback hardcore to the ~brain~//2 i'm frustrated with you niggas always kickin me ~down~ to the ~ground~ i felt like i was a disrace to what i ~surround~ but now i improved so watch me ~astound~//3 i'ma retaliate with my ~army~ better think twice before you ~disarm me~ take a look at ya nigga that tried to ~harm me~ i showed him leather face before the ~alarm G~//4 better be cuatious when you hear me ~rap~ it's equivalent to a death ~trap~ ya body will be parolized and ~collapse~//5 i'll admit it i ain't black or~white~so don't look for me cus i'm outta ~sight~ i must be ~invisible~ cus i ain't even ~visible~ in the~bright~light~//6 plz give me advice on how to write a good ryhme |
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IP: 4D18 261C
shit was iight paco,if you want advicejust pep other cats shit on this forum or anyother forum,collect ideas and influences and then produce something you feel...if you need any help pm me,and ill try my best eh?.peep somethign ive written on the open mic forums too,just do a search with my name aiight...elevate
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IP: 27EA 5505
that shit was wack i think...no point to the rhyme no clever verbals no clever anythin...you need a scheme when you spittin dunny...and stop tryin to sound like the other 587543876487 mcs rhymin like that...be original namsayin..keep elevating...wahid
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IP: 399E F0FD
a'ight
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IP: 0799 C762
u show potential in spots but the
other guys are right, ya need to develoop ur own style and come up with a more original topic just look at some of the more respected heads on the sites crap, u'll learn a lot PS peep my "Foresaken Emcee" or/and "The Lonely Mic" thx |
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IP: 4577 CD9A
cool... the shit ain't have me like Damn! but it was cool fam
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IP: 5153 3B92
a'ight thanx fo the advise
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IP: 736D B1B5
this wasn't really about anything except "I'm back, and I kick ass" not a very good topic. Try to write about something that's meaningful to you.
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IP: 5153 3B92
a'ight
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