yeah yeah
Im a kill you with this rap tune//
Drop a line so hard you be screaming for your heart pills//
To say it more precisely "im a fuck you up"//
Knock you about like you a muthfuckin tamberine//
Make you scream like you just had a bad dream//
If you think thats the end of it//
Ive got bad news Ive only just begone//
Im a beat you up just for the fun//
Like when pacs killler holded that fucker of a gun//
Im Hazardous//
Im dangerous//
Im the new femcee if your curious//
If you cant rap dont worry//
You just go on home//
and make a living by trading baseball caps//
I havnt got more skills than the war lord katz//
But i have something and thats bettter than nuffin//
Im feed up of being judged by my race//
Next time you call me whitey your in for a big chase//
I aint no wigga cos im not a wanabe nigga//
Im no gangsta and im no a wanksta//
Im just a femcee who wants to be a great rap MC//

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decent drop.......dunno if its ur first one but was good attemp
need to structure it a bit better with the flow and rhyming.....

thanx the rest usually diss me......cos when i make every word rymme they say im trying to be eminem......LOLOLOL.....Im just new so i jsut gotta get use to it....

1. don't worry who they say ur trying to be like. it's better to rhyme every word than hardly any (like i saw above) try to elevate more, work on flow and punches. IE i think it shows skill if you can rhyme every word and have it make sense. also i wouldn't use the 'N' word. but then again that's my 2 cents.
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like dis...
Im a kill you with this rap track//
Drop a line so hard you be screaming that you having a major heart attack//
To say it more precisely "im a fuck you up"and brother an sister you know dat i got a gat in my back pack//
Knock you about like iM SMOKING CRACK//
Hommie it isnt a threat but im being deadly serious when I say watch your back//
I know im not black but Ill beat your ass like im big daddy mack//
You gonna wish that you said wasnt what you said because Im not whack//
ETC.......................

Decent drop ,,, need more vocab and metas though ,, tha wordplay was whack , , ,but overall , decent shit

thank God yo, i didnt hear eminems name in dere once....haha, four things gurl: 1. 1.worplay,2.metaphores,3.similies,4.vocabulary,
u improvin kid jus lik i said, keep postin ...peace eazy

ps dont eva use da ''N'' word again cos if u aint black, u aint spoused ta use dat word, and if u were freestylin in front of black people and u said dat shit, theyed fuck u up, badly,

i liked it...keep on spittin



KEEP HOLDIN DOWN CITY LIFE TO





holla at ya kid

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Those lines were extremely whack ,,,, work on ur lyrics dawg

why aint u goin home then

jus playin....haha

was it me or did that not rhyme at all?

Was It Me Or Was That Shit?!?