yo this is my latest post. hope yall like it

yo some how some way im gone get to the crown
niggaz think they hurting me just by putting me down//
When spitomatic retire you bet im gone be the king
Im gone be nationally known on this whole rap thing//
The crown will be mine nigga however i have to get it
Either splittin ya wig, takin ya kids you bet im gone get it//
Fuckin with a true thug nigga like me
Is like a emperor being takin over by tyranny//
Thats some shit that noboady wishes to see
Im telling you now aint nobody fuckin with me//
My emcee life is all about takin the crown
If i kill you ya head might not be layin where your body is found//
Im here to take the crown thats the title you wish to borrow
I aint here to make friends im here to drown niggas in sorrow//

i didnt like this dawg ,,, u gotta up ur vocabulary ,,,,,,

thanks for the tips

multis son- check it if u say a couple lines, dont just rhyme tha last words of each, rhyme tha last two or three

ie yadaydayda hit-da-bong
yadaydayda spit-ya-song

thatll make ur shit a lil more complex
keep upin