check it...

Im fully loaded with so many hot 16's you'de think its childs porn/
ure rhymes are usless like a bag of unpopped popcorn/
ure fake rhymes are gettin weak but mine are gettin higher/
"SUCKA EMCEES SHOULD CALL ME SIRE"/

I dont gotta have a fake chorus, my rhymes are underground/
thats where yoy be hiding cuz when i shoot i make a sound/
Now you afriad of me,fake emcee go cry to your mom/
my lyrics blow up like a bomb, you think im done? Youre wrong!/
I dont care where you come from, the streets in MD ville/
when im done spittin ure gonna need an overdose on advil/

if i was a dino i'd be the rapasaurus/
ure rhymes would be short if you didnt have a dam chorus/
and it is short, cuz ya aint got a manhood/
u didnt grow up in the hood, u fake rapper, go back where u should/
bustin rhymes till nightfall this way and that/
i rhyme about the truth, not just a fat chik and a gat/

hey Benz this one for you. tell me what ya think i wrote it quick yall so it aint that good but i had to start a little heat up in here

-OuT-

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uppin for replys on my new joint

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i dont kno if you realized it but u stold that line from RUN DMC..
"Sucka emcees better call me Sire"
^^^^Run dmc used that line in Rock box , ,, but maybe its a coincidecne , , anywayz you're as whack Benz quik......

yes i know i did that was the point...i didnt bite off it im just saying the sucka emcees like him should call me sire...

buta ya didnt mean to do anything of RunDMC cuz they kick

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uppin hey ya'll i know this aint good okay, i could do alot better if i took my time but i jsut wante to tell benz that he shouldnt be doin this if he aint got the skill

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ya its aight benz we cool now man. Hey ya'll imma stay here a lil while more before i go back to poetry aight

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uppin for comments i know it aint all that i really wanna know waht i can do better yall...plz dont take a glance and just say "man nigga ure gay get outta here" tell me what ican improve on and be specific. thx.

-OuT-

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other than the first line..."so many hot 16's you'de think its childs porn/" not bein yours it was ok. some were good. you should try addin more multis though. keep spittin