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Old 05-11-03, 11:42 AM   #1
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key-style, check it out

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when i breath
the whole word shatters when i exhale what i think.
starting chaos chaotically
having psycholgist see
"apocalypse now" then just a movie
on a screen
with two actors that got academies.

I believe that lies can get me paid quickly
so i become a 50
cent prototype,
i been number 1 since last night
by calling myself a killer
with a dysfunctional family life.
ANd it works like the campaign of George Bush
only if speak simple and sing all of my hooks.

like Nate Dogg-i learned that lesson
after 21 questions
when the fiftenth came
and my girl explain
that her giving head
wouldn't happen.

I became pissed.
Told her to get out, but i lied about it.
LIke Ja Rule in XXL beating 50 with crutches.
BUt that isnt' the half of my war path.
like Chuck D,
i help the blind see what the time be
by using the clock off FLava Flavs body.
pointing at the 12 o'clock sign
explaining this is when your die.
Like the girl out the movie "Ring"
coming out the screen
burn em with my flow made of kerosene,,,,,,,
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Old 05-11-03, 12:58 PM   #2
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Lyrics were simple , , , lines were too short ,,,,,, no vocab , ,no wordplay ,, this drop was Whack.............i think u can do better dawg
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Old 05-11-03, 08:51 PM   #3
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dang dawg, bash dont tell him whats bad, tell him waht he can improve on...dam...

Flow: Needs improvement man, its really choppy.
Vocab: Boring! No effence but i only read a lil, yet it was small.
Length: Make it bigger man.
Topic: Lame man, dont talk about gay stuff like money and how you can kick someones ass, speak the truth and speak it good and u'll be hott.

aight ya need improvement keep spittin and get better, and take a lookat my stuff.

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