Dont give me no crap...

I spit it on the mic//
I feel the heat and report the meat//
You try to steal but you remain ugly as an eel//
You criticize but you ain't even know how to lyricize//
I hold my own and when they rush I bus this shit//
I extravagate the ways of rap//
Im the middle star a far//
Im young but aspiring like a shooting star//
I put the r in rap//
I file it as quickly as down pat//
I sign your forehead with my name//
Don't you ever forget the K4$ay//

i ain't want comments that are critical, comments on how to improve or what i did good...

aite ya gotta look at waht ure saying....not trying to critisize, but "you put the R in rap..."....explain what that means....for all i know it could mean you put the Rabbits in rap.....ya gotta explain waht ure talkin bout, and work on ya flow, you could spit a really good shit if ya tried man, if ya do hit me back and ill check it.


-OuT-

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not bad... but maybe with the lines like "I feel the heat and report the meat" u could bring the rhymin words closer together and pop another in like i dunno "i feel heat report meat flow it to a beat" or somen like that. All & all not a bad effort hope i helped

Man u newbies are a fuckin disgrace