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05-27-03, 01:48 AM | #1 | ||||||
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“There’s a War Going On Outside. . .”
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This isn't much. . . Just a little something I did for a poetry class after reading some B.S. article. Enjoy and drop feed back. . . Thanx.
“There’s a War Going On Outside. . .” Polluted oceans, unheard notions President Bush wants to set the ball in motion Even though the battles is across the sea, it seems to me “There’s a war going on outside no man is safe from” Planes hum and tanks roll, while up goes the death toll Too many eyes on us, the government better keep this on the hush These bloody conflicts . . . clearly refined Our country’s politics . . . merely defined Old wounds that can’t be bought over with a cold beer What I don’t want to be is what I see in the mirror It reflects this world’s fear; all I can hear is pain in the distance All I want to do is disassemble this stance on war Torn between love and hate; I want something more To stop what happens behind closed doors, I need a cure Something pure to heal these blistering sores on my mind Something kind that can’t be found, to dissipate this frown of mine - DLP Last edited by DateLifePlus : 05-27-03 at 01:51 AM. |
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05-27-03, 03:03 AM | #2 | ||||||
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I thought it was pretty good. Some of it flowed a little ruff at times. But overall It was good. Keep postin' !
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05-29-03, 12:44 AM | #3 | ||||||
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Thanx for the reply, but this is poetry. . . The ''flow" is all in how you read it.
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05-30-03, 02:04 AM | #4 | ||||||
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I liked.. Most definately.
Nice shit. |
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