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06-17-03, 01:37 AM
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Am I Still Living?
IP: 0BA5 A800
Am I Still Living??
My mind is still operating... I can't think of what just occured, but seems like ages ago Deep in thought and so disturbed, Aching head to toe Im still pulsing blood through out my body, why do I feel numb I can remember every event in my life, but none of this one My lungs are still breathing... I can feel my hot breath on my hand, im breathing heavily Trying to inhale every last bit of air, counciousness is gaining steadily I feel as if my lungs are collapsing every time I take a deep breath Try to speak with the little air ive gained but theres bairly any left My mucles are still strong.. But stiff, As if someone had pulled on them with all there strength Im remembering a run now, a run to safty but I didnt make the length I can feel blood pouring out of my muscles like daggers still in them Bruises engulf my entire body like black and blue pigeons, did I try to defend? My heart as failed.. I dont here my heart beat anymore, im getting nervous Am I still alive, or have I been attacked by deaths curses Im seeing those whitelights everyone has refered 2 Masked men hudling over me, am I in the emergancy room... To be continued... |
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06-17-03, 01:38 AM
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IP: 0BA5 A800
Uppin for feedback!
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06-17-03, 01:39 AM
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Elevating Beyond Perfect
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IP: F953 2586
nice shit man, keep dat shit tight,i was feelin it
holla, -Purple Haze |
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06-17-03, 01:40 AM
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IP: 0BA5 A800
^^ Thanks Up!
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06-17-03, 01:43 AM
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-Real Time-
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IP: FDD6 AE15
its not ILL .. you could greatly improve...
go join the RBTL (rap battles topical league) they give you a topic and you then you write a 16-48 liner on it... -Sureal |
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06-17-03, 01:44 AM
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IP: 0BA5 A800
Okay thanks Sureal
Will do |
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06-17-03, 02:12 AM
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IP: 0BA5 A800
This wasnt that bad...
You should of continued, and focused on the topic more {PLEX} |
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06-17-03, 03:35 AM
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IP: 5953 BF60
this is some tight shit i liked this alot,.......
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06-17-03, 10:39 AM
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IP: 0BA5 A800
Uppin for feedback!
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06-19-03, 11:36 PM
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Yeah Keep Biting.
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IP: 0779 261A
this was a dope drop. broke down the topic into fragments and blazed it. and it is a dope topic indeed. you had some multis in there which complimented the flow. plus i seen a lil story telling talent in there. overall nice drop.
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