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Eternal Flower
IP: 25C2 23BD
A few words be said
before I lay this rose Petels fall ajacent.. your life came to a close. A laughter or a secret across the beach we strand Together my darling, Ill never let go of your hand. My love filled you deeply... like all these grains of sand With tide sprinkles memories that roar across this land. I fall into the seashore unto your eyes i seek and find a world all too bittersweet. A moon sleeps above us Silence casts below A glimpse into the future a cold wind stills silver gallows. Frail fingers exposed to the sun Petels inravel in my hands A piece of me forgotten A slice of this lonely man The dignity of sparrows fly amoung the trees rustle future in song that toss about dead leaves My lips to yours through time you sleep This rose will last forever because your memory speaks. |
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Special Ghost To Blow
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IP: C1DA C961
~Make Me A Moderator~
adjacent* good vocab so far though My love filled you deeply... like all these grains of sand With tide sprinkles memories that roar across this land *A Tad Of Imagery....Not Bad Frail fingers exposed to the sun Petels inravel in my hands A piece of me forgotten A slice of this lonely man *Flowed Better Than Everything Else All In All This Was Nice And Meaningful And Could Be Better With More Imagery To Your Story....Decent Piece Please Be Respectful And Reply To Those Who Decide to Show Interest In Your Flows ~Content~ Con-tent Say It With Me..I Know You Can Last edited by Content : 07-26-03 at 03:50 PM. |
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Str8 From CopKilla Queens
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IP: 4577 CD9A
i liked the imagery in this piece it was some pure poetry and i like that u had it all on the table my favorite line i believe was the last, props DA 1luv.
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