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09-26-03, 11:38 AM
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Who Would Have Known...
IP: 134B 1BAF
Deleted at the request of writer.
Oh, and CLOSED. Last edited by varentao : 09-28-03 at 02:50 PM. |
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09-26-03, 02:51 PM
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6 of her posts ARE replies, Content. If you want people to reply to more than 6 pieces before posting up 1 of their own you have a lot more deleting to do cause no one is replying to 6 pieces before putting up their own..
Last edited by Legendary : 09-26-03 at 03:33 PM. |
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09-26-03, 06:31 PM
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IP: 134B 1BAF
u should jus delete this,
cuz this is sum bullshit i wouldnt post a poem without readin & followin the rules, but its whatever i completely agree with legendary peace the fuck out |
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09-26-03, 07:05 PM
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Tampons are expensive
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Content, you shouldve just closed this thread for a bit and not have edited it like that.
Well you can do is put her verses back then close this thread and then after she got done replying to some poems then you reopen it. EDiting posts is not bad at all but it gets off sometimes. THanks for your kind consideration.
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<br><br><center>- Shiznit - - Tampons are still expensive - - That's a Fact - </center> |
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09-26-03, 07:22 PM
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sorry to shiznit...ha'nae...you followed the rules..many havent..
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09-26-03, 07:38 PM
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hand on over her mouth, She bites his pinky.. just
barely breakin' the skin, He bangs her head hard against the dirty cigarette ridden pavement.. i I felt this piece was good BUT I also felt you forst too much description into it…like the CIGARETTE ridden pavement line… your piece would be more thinker friendly if some details were left out or shortened … your piece had great concept and was EXCELLENT on the storytelling tip…I feel if you lessened your descriptive words your piece wouldn’t be as cloudy and would be OUTSTANDING |
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09-26-03, 08:10 PM
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Sorry to ha'nae on behalf of us all. It was a mistake. It isn't always like this. Not at all...
Onto the piece.. It was all quite predictable. But in a good way. It was fairly blunt in what it was saying. You tried to get behind the whole thing. The mindset, the emotions...the struggle. And you did it quite well. the flow was good. I was able to read it without stopping much. You didn't rely on rhyming or a set structure as such. Which i felt helped the piece a lot. The ending was relatively tame. But in another sense, it was good. ...resp.... |
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