aimed at this kid John and his crew

Chorus x2:
Sick off dis gangsta gangsta shit dat yall spit/
gangsta gangsta/yall dun none of it/
gangsta gangsta/to bad yall dun admit/
gangsta gangsta/you nuttin more den a wanksta...


when i grab da mic-my fans luvs me like a man luvs a dyke/
im more verbically insane then a Retard with a pencil-
and im tellin u young cats- i dun bite- its just mental/
so u wannabes i hope this rhyme is influental/
ill cap u fakes/i dun make mistakes/there ain't no second takes/
keep spittin fake see what happens-there ain't no acciden'ts its mishappens/
u fakes ima stab yo abs- wit a verbal vocab/
that will leave you wit a verbal scab-sendin u back to the rap lab/
i spit so quik-u think its a rap trick-u got lost and u need a map to stat intact/
but u whacked-hit u wit words that feel as if u got Smacked!/
it feels the same when u ballin and u get packed/

Chorus x2

im sick of these hatas-traitors-stab u in da back/
snitches-kids who can't get bitches-those kids usually left in stiches/
or in the morgue 6 feet deep-eterinity they will sleep/
kids who are fake-for gods sake-should drop the mic/
and dun spit-sit-and listen-beatin me is like the immpossible misson/
it can't be done-can't be won-only choice is to lose-
im like the machine that don't got the "off" fuze/
dun need to hit u phsycially to abuse/
just gotta spit at u mentally for u 2 bruise/
when the Kings roll threw-we stand true/
and wipe out "The Pussy Crew"-John im talkin to you/
latin king love-stands above-you fags-odun need a tek-
to impload ur neck-hit u words and ull be dyin in a sec/
keep fuckin wit me and when i see u ima have my strap/
ima take ur crew off the Chi-Town "map"/

Chorus x1

FUCK John- Fuck Craig- Fuck Jamal-Fuck Roland-
John AND THE KRAZY CLIQUE CAN SUCK MY MOTHA FUCKIN DICK
MAN FUCK THE WHOLE FUCKIN C.T.B CREW FUCK YALL NIGGAS
WAIT TILL I COME THREW U NOT GON EVEN SEE IT COMIN MOTHA FUCKAS

*sudden pause*
*shots fire+ laughter*
SUP NOW MOTHA FUCKAS

AMOR DE REY
KING LOVE

lol this was pretty straight the chours was catchty, a few thing in the first lines was straight and a lot more at the end the end was rhymin good. keep spittin

These are my fav lines:
ill cap u fakes/i dun make mistakes/there ain't no second takes/
keep spittin fake see what happens-there ain't no acciden'ts its mishappens/
u fakes ima stab yo abs- wit a verbal vocab/
that will leave you wit a verbal scab-sendin u back to the rap lab/


i spit so quik-u think its a rap trick-u got lost and u need a map to stat intact/
but u whacked-hit u wit words that feel as if u got Smacked!/
it feels the same when u ballin and u get packed/


beatin me is like the immpossible misson/
it can't be done-can't be won-only choice is to lose-
im like the machine that don't got the "off" fuze/
dun need to hit u phsycially to abuse/
just gotta spit at u mentally for u 2 bruise/

a lil slow but good chorus and good rhyme scheme, keep droppin,~1~

Decent flow and decent rhyme scheme keep elevatin nigga

this was sum tight shit. Keep droppin. I hope to see more shit like this from u. I wonder how them niggaz feel to be dissed right now lol.

it ain't like they gon' come on here and fuckin look at this diss he prob just spit it out of anger..

i liked it so much i read it twice the flow was nice i wasn't really feeling the chorus though that whole wanksta shit is getting kinda played out but yo i felt the emotion in this so it was definently one of those drops a mufucka can connect to. keep killing them. 1

yea i wrote this.. they banned my name LiL LoCo~ so i made this .. i didn't want everyone knownin but i droped this flow.

uppin

Nice drop it...I kinda liked it the way u structred it and the wording was also good can u take a look at these
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=71510
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=71509