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Old 09-23-03, 06:58 PM   #1
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===I coalesce-------=+

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ne plus ultra
i look between......
two sides too full frontal it seemed.....
a serious life caught between verticle seams...
a mind, this life, a dream

Seperate lives and still we share the same name....
Rooted together forever deep within a picture frame......
Granted it seems i am the same being.
trapped, and unsure to a simple lifes meaning....

I breathe deep, and think?

This air is tasteless but still i digest it.....
Confusion compounding i compressed it...
i see more for me ... I coalesce....
A new Being....


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Old 09-23-03, 07:06 PM   #2
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hmmm...to me this would've worked out better in poetry.
I seemed to catch a more poetic vibe off of it.
It had a deep subject matter, and vocab was good, but all in all, it seemed way too short, and though it was good, it would've been better in poetry.Good shit though.
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Old 09-23-03, 07:23 PM   #3
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sadly everyone sleeps at the poetry section so i usually put them in both to aquire more feed back thanks for the words.

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Old 09-23-03, 10:34 PM   #4
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^^^like him i was feelin a poetry vibe, but anyway, the vocab and wordplay were ok, the content and topic were pretty original. keep postin man i really enjoyed readin that.

yo can u please check out my post if u have the time?
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=81167
thanx

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