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Old 09-23-03, 10:16 PM   #1
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Topic: Reflection
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Old 09-25-03, 04:59 AM   #2
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I am HERE!
 
Old 09-25-03, 06:35 PM   #3
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just checkin in, ill have mine by saturday.
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Old 09-27-03, 06:13 PM   #4
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i look at the reflections in a mirror/
the skies start to turn clearer which means things will get better/
hopefully i can get rid of some reflections and keep some i want/
some of this shit i cant stand/
i am forgettin the interceptuions that have interfered with no more suspensions/
the reflections are just past images that are recorded in your brain/
it is like a non - stopping train that keeps followin until your insane/
denyin every reflection that has haunted and taunted and tried to step in my way/
lookin forward to every day that i live until my last day when everything i have done pays off/
i dont need more chokes and more coughs/
this is just the beginning of good things i want to quaff/
its like im on a desert with the sun beamin down on me/
being burnt off the suns reflections on my body/
i better move before i get more pain and feel and be permanent like a stain/
it wont go away its something you gotta live with/
i am gettin sick of everything i hear be a myth/
its leaving me hard and stiff like i am a dick/
everything is goin by so quick is what im gettin sick/
we gotta slow down and get things together/
the skies are clear so i dont want rainy weather/
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Old 09-28-03, 01:52 AM   #5
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Looking In. Upon Further Inspection...
Who Am I?... Oh, more importantly, is that a zit?!
*Must you abuse me with inquiries such as this? At least this incarnation didn't require me to 'grant' shit*
*Mother fucker, what are you thinking? Your involved ponderence is my wish...*

Like, Love and Compliments are a foreign vision in this boring mix of submission and dominance/
It insights trouble when a lover labels you Above Average, how's that look to us?/
You could be normal, or better! The implications are obvious/
Fierce denial makes your overseer a liar in the eyes of distrust/
You've been inspired all your life to be the best/
But even amont the rest you'd find one with whom to rest/
An opportunity of saying "we" and "us"/
A chance of real Being with more meaning than purely lust/
You can take it in like that and let it fester and grow if you like/
It'll get the best of you, I hope you know: Thicker skin only needs a bigger knife/
Face it: Early on life is upfront and to your back is a breeze/
As it turns, strife turns it rough, like elbows and knees/
If you want nature, savor something other than burnt trees/
Get over your disbelief, you're all good guys and ladies/
Stop to smell the roses, even if you're afraid of bumbling Bees/
Next time take care not to simply stare through it/
There's more than just you, when you see the surrounding, you'll see your true val-ue/
Learn to love not just the blue, but the greys too, just as He drew it/
Cuz two years from now, it could be you who says: Damn, I blew it/
It's a shame what modern man must do to see clearer/
The world around you enshrouds you beautifully, oh Mr. Man in the mirror/


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Old 09-28-03, 02:00 AM   #6
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this has to be a no show its now sunday
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Old 09-28-03, 02:11 AM   #7
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man next time come prepared instead of typin it up at the last minute. this is obscene and embarassing.
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Old 09-28-03, 02:23 AM   #8
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he edited it to make it look like it was at 11:52, it was really posted past midnight.
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Old 09-28-03, 02:39 AM   #9
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Okay... now that the vote swaying is over...
You really don't like it? Damn...
I didn't realize how obscene and embarassing it was...
Sorry bro. Peace.
 
Old 09-28-03, 02:41 AM   #10
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Oh shit... I'm sorry I was typing my shit at 4 minutes after the hour. I mean, if that's a big problem... you know. I don't want you to have to be a poor sport about it. Could you just be quiet now?
 
Old 09-28-03, 02:53 AM   #11
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im not bein a poor sport im just sayin get it in better next time thatnhaving it late.
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Old 09-28-03, 09:12 AM   #12
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First Off.. This Was A Poor Battle.. Really Weak
Compared To Other League Battles

Simple Breadown Here Kids..

Opener - La
On Topic - Both
Flow - 2Hot
Depth - La
Creativity - None
Metas - La if Any
Wordplay - La If Any
Shock Factor - None
Finisher - La

Overall - La
 
Old 09-28-03, 03:50 PM   #13
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Yeah, i didnt really fell 2hots verse either, but i disagree, i dont think LaRyan won this, 2hots had a lot more substance, i liked his take on it, neither came really dope, but they'll learn as the league continues i guess.

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Old 09-29-03, 01:10 AM   #14
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Wow... That's incredible.
 
Old 09-29-03, 10:27 AM   #15
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2hot2handle-don't freepost in your thread. and don't sway votes. and don't be a poor sport. this is all for fun, so if you're going to be a dick about time's and dates and all that you can just screw off.

now, on the positive side of things, I'm going to critique you both.

2hot-Your verse had a lot of good content. The flow wasn't very good, and I thought there were a few lines that didn't rhyme, so you need to work on that. The random similes and metaphors were a really nice touch, because you connected thing that I didn't think had any connection. Overall, theres room for improvement, but it was still pretty good.

LRS- damn. this was pretty nice man, your into was rather hilarious. Theres the flow issue here too. People will tell you that flow isn't important in a topical, but thats a filthy lie. Flow is always important. Your metaphors were incredibly nice. There was a lot of insight in this verse and it still made pretty good sense. Your closer killed it.

vote: LaRyanShabaz
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