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Old 10-11-03, 08:25 AM   #1
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...::Mind Over Matter::...

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Are you still stuck on the meaning of the title entitles?
Its the method of momentum for your rifle too cycle..

Matter=Objects
Objectes=Objectives
Objectives=Mind

Mind
------------ = Power
Objective


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Liable to not be admirable and have implications in creation
If we're def to what manifests then its detrimental potential
Intentional conventional progress leaves hope compressed
Express Impress with science being perpetual exceptional
Whats Correctable? Only the scale of the tactical process
Mathematical Contest!! That’s how you concoct delectable
Now comprehend how to defend from all the threats set
Except your debts from when you mended all the trends
Power seized with ease?! Do anything to ensure you win
Destined sins are the price you payed to feed your creed
..Next up Kids..
To command work to be adapted to the scientific foundation
Demands lurched protract within raps with terrific relations
Exquisite innovations is the objective to completely dominate
Revisit complications to have subjective credibility designate
To destruction..
Rid Corruption.. With conduction.. Without reduction..


That Is all class, You may now once again be dismissed
With full math, With also the know how on how to exist
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Old 10-11-03, 10:29 AM   #2
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NICE NICE NICE PIECE.
Wow, This One Amazed Me, Nice Style, And Alot Of Different Terms. Of Course, The Whole Structure Confused Me, And This Goes Down The Middle Of THe Line That Seperates Open Mic ANd Poetry, While Of COurse Displaying your Talents And Shit. Good Drop
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Old 10-11-03, 10:32 AM   #3
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pretty good vocab, flow'd good most places.. again' it's like my old style lacin' a text with multi's of big words, i don't peticularily like this style ne-more, but i's still good dawg...1
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Old 10-11-03, 01:25 PM   #4
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Pretty good here...
Decent topic...

Imagry wasnt bad withthe vocab...

Pretty good flow...

Yep...
Good piece...
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Old 10-11-03, 01:36 PM   #5
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that was fuckin tight in my opinion, i was feein ur imagery the most, but the vocab and wordplay fit ur topic well, that was a hella nice post, keep droppin homie, i was definetely feelin that.

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Old 10-11-03, 01:55 PM   #6
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Ur flow was ill dawg, the complexety inside was amazin, and real new never saw it b4 , .. ...damn


Ur vocab was blazin aswell,...u had a damn hot intro , ...iunno , i think this was a damn good piece....nuttin more to say bout this

just a good piece

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Old 10-11-03, 03:18 PM   #7
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Thanx.. Up
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Old 10-11-03, 05:31 PM   #8
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This was unique beyond comprehension. The rhyme scheme is one rarely ever found in this type of a piece, & unfortunately wasn't quite pulled off perfectly. It was a good attempt, though!

When writing a hip-hop type of a piece with multiple syllables, it's so hard to pull of a unique rhyme scheme. Mixed with the extent of your vocabulary, your task is only harder. First off, I'd tone down the vocabulary a bit and work on word choice. The only person I've ever seen pull of an absolute "dictionary drop" is N-Demik, & you're not quite on his level (yet). Secondly, make sure that your "bars" are absolutely even - to the syllable count - when using this type of a rhyme scheme.

I was definitely impressed with your opening and closing lines. They were succinct and constructed in a perfect manner - try to adapt the whole piece to that sort of a flow and word choice. Still improving , g'luck.
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Old 10-11-03, 07:10 PM   #9
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Thankyou.. Much appreciated

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Old 10-11-03, 11:20 PM   #10
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i realy felt the intro, and nice vocab, i felt that one, keep'em comin
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Old 10-12-03, 05:00 AM   #11
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I guess you didn't read past the intro.. lol
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Old 10-12-03, 05:13 AM   #12
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i disagree with g.hod i think your format suited perfectly.....i flowed it instead of reading it and found it really amplified what you doit her and i enjoyed it.
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Old 10-12-03, 07:38 AM   #13
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Thanx
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Old 10-12-03, 07:42 AM   #14
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Nice shit here man, vocab, flow was on point
Over nice ass drop....keep it up playa
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Old 10-12-03, 12:48 PM   #15
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