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My World
IP: CC07 EC19
My room is my world
I live in a spherical cube, A dark light, And open smallness I sit on top of my forest, where I rest I cant afford to keep the sea running I struggle to get to the antartic, where he placed my food Boys and girls go dating at the cinama The enlightened extra terrerstrail Stuffing there heads with propaganda I glance out my window And look at the stars waste their energy on sun's products No care for our space I look at the carpet The goverment bacteria hires spiders to cause riot, and use them as an excuse to close my poetry My poetry My pen Is all I have My worlds core is made of ink Volcanoes express my pain And burn out out my pain But its time to take flight I open my chest to the six nuclear bombs And cause the second big bang for I am everything, but nothing |
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ive read your peices and ive replied and yet i receive no gratitude waht so ever
grrrrrrrr anyways moving on The enlightened extra terrerstrail Stuffing there heads with propaganda ^ reminded me of ET when he see's teh flower whilting and makes it reblossom your structure the declinging of the sentences to just two word phrases was a good touch to add to this peice i felt as if your voice was increasing as the amount of words you spoke decreased was a nice peice and it was good to read at this time in the mornig when nothing seems right hazy |
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Yeah this was a good poetry piece, i was feeling the meaning to it, it was a good read i thought, you had a lot of deep lines that i was feeling, and overall i thought this was a good piece, keep up the good work.
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IP: CC07 EC19
sorry hazy.b imma reply to your poems. thanks for the appreciation, upping this though
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