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10-07-03, 07:26 PM
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New start? *Notebook Piece*
IP: FF40 570D
*NoteBook Piece
New Start? Couldnt imagine, the inpact of invisible scars, disguised as hurricanes in inner wars. Drugs abusin, savage of every kind, junkies, givin birth to crack-babys born blind. People facin, situations they cant figure, seein no way out only by usin the trigger. Politicians, corrupt spreadin vicious lies, hope bein spread by the devil in disguise. Dirty statements,lighten strength in peoples heart, but down inside i know we never gettin a new start.
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10-07-03, 07:29 PM
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Eddy.
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IP: FF40 570D
This is a piece from a few years ago, i was joung, and some real shit happend^ its kinda simple, ....but i wanted to share it, ....feedback plz.
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10-07-03, 08:57 PM
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Eddy.
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IP: FF40 570D
What a shame^^ Feed back would be nice
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10-07-03, 08:59 PM
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IP: 3AE5 5785
ayo i like it. it was a good topic it flowed easily....nice drop homie
can u feedback http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthr...&threadid=84088 |
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10-07-03, 09:06 PM
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IP: 33C3 15FC
Great Piece first of all your words and the way you tell your personal feelings of the world shows great imagery...
This makes your piece not only deep but very personal... I think you could have extended it though... Last edited by Northern Touch. : 10-07-03 at 09:11 PM. |
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10-07-03, 09:09 PM
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Eddy.
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IP: FF40 570D
Yup, my views on the world ^^ when i was 16 are blazin ! lol^
Thnx for the feedbak^
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10-07-03, 09:16 PM
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IP: 8BEC CACE
This Was Dope...
Flow Was Short and Sweet, but it helped Exaggerate more on the Message. It was Nice, and even though you were sixteen, It Showed What Type of Artist You evolved From, Which Is Dope. Good Shit.
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10-07-03, 09:21 PM
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Eddy.
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IP: FF40 570D
Quote:
That touched me, ....^ Preciated
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10-07-03, 09:30 PM
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IP: 2ED0 C40F
ok was short but sweet,good expression and alot of issues i feel strongly about myself were well portrayed here.
Peace |
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10-08-03, 09:49 AM
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Eddy.
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IP: FF40 570D
Means allot to me, ....glad yall liked it ^
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10-08-03, 11:56 AM
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IP: 19AF 50C1
it was short but very concious
i like it more poetic then rap song though so it gets bettr thought |
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