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10-07-03, 12:54 PM
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yo here's another keystyle check it out
IP: 3E39 1F80
this is a keystyle so let me know what u think
yo yo ima a thug and i know that u soft// i shoot long while u shoot close like miniture golf// don't play thug i'll send my men 2 get ya// cause im known 2 have mo soldiers than adolf hitler// u herbs betta get da picture// 2 me u like a blount and im willin 2 split ya// everywhere i go niggas on my dick// and u pussy, so it's jus like watching a flick// a should've known i was poppin a bitch// da block love it cause they knew i was stoppin a snitch// (now dats gangsta) i spit raw there's no need 2 perpatrate// shoot at ya feet make u bleed and percalate//(haha) ima in a zone and i got da greed of ricki lake// u wont da purple i got da best weed dat's in this state// fuk it i gotta go 2 class jus a little keystyle so let me know how yall feel about it |
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10-07-03, 05:39 PM
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IP: 7EB4 F731
yo its ok but there is alot of room for improvement...not really feelin this flow...elevate yo vocab.....yo don't take this personally an start hatin....keep droppin u got potiential....peace..
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10-07-03, 06:01 PM
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IP: 9C1E 2B43
Yeah..this was ok...everything could be better...try using internals to help support the flow so it flows better...vocab could be up'd like was said before..your structure could be improved a little bit..but it was ok..keep at it..and keep dropping.
and if you could return some feedback.. http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=84048 |
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