it's unbelievable how many people see me as evil/
n march towards me to keep me locked away in a steeple/
they melt tha key to tha cell...now people/
leave me alone, can u not see tha evil/
that be at home when Kobe's in tha zone/
and u hear a physchopath on tha phone/
if u know wat i mean, i'm not green/
i've been part of tha scene way befo 2003/
rolled around n decided to do a 360/
to have my fans not want to listen to me/
i also got peeps like Jacob dissin me, but listen G/
all ur lyrical rhythms seem to be missin me/
it's simple ain't it? when ur layin dead/
under tha war banner n ur drenched in red/
and i'm holdin ur decapitated head in my hands/
hold a ban if ur not a fan, but first, get off my land, <click click> UNDERSTAND?/
i won't autograph my autobiography/
for u ebay users who wanna make a prophit off of me/
stop tha mockin me, hatin me but copyin me/
hopin ur stoppin me from droppin a hot CD/
croppin a lot of beef to start poppin a lot of G's/
don't try to stop this MC...especially cause i'm high off tha coffee/
let's go wit lattes and feminist destroyed chop shops/
tha new million man march holds guns, gats n glocks...pop pop!/

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FLow Was Good....Your Rhyming Sheme Was Real Common...
Up Your Vocab <..........







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you kinda used a style like Eminems...(good style to use)
this topic was ok, and you had a decent amount of visual.
Just use good vocabulary... I've seen your other spits, and
their better than this one... just keep droppin....
A.T.-

yea, my otha pieces have been a lot better, i don't know wat's happened to me, i think i'm workin too much...

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ok, flow wasnt bad, vocab could use work, structure was good, maybe could have used more mulites....overall it wasnt bad but it was kinda simple....keep droppin...

if you get a chance could you check out my latest open mic and leave me some feedback...
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=83967