Once you start to like something
And it becomes a need for you
You need that rush to keep you on your feet
It feels like an ultimate thrill of your life
And all of a sudden, BAM

Your world come crashing down
Like a ton of bricks
Your rush is in danger of dieing
Its riding on the brink of disaster

You see the bubble gums in the rear view mirror
As he walks to your car and shines the light at you
As you hand him your life and soul
He takes it like it a fucking nothing

Your friend is scared shitless sitting next to you
He gets out to talk to the devil himself
And is shot down, like a fucking bird
Nothing can help you now

He comes back and hands you your soul back
With that little pink slip that kills you
After you pull off and away from him
Your mind is going a million miles an hour
Pulling you in a thousand directions

After all this shit you are put through
You finally realize that you lost the war
And it will never be the same
In any way, shape or form

Your life will never be the same
And you think its bad now
Just wait and see what is yet to come
So enjoy the rush while you can
And it doesn't pay to do wrong

MM

I think this is a pretty goo piece. I think it could have several meanings to the person reading it. All-in-all it was good for free verse...

peAce

hahah....had to post here....i actually didnt read the poem yet but you have a funny name. keep it upp

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^^^ lol straight mod comedy.

on anotha side this stuff was raw as all hell. just a constant out pour of deep thought mixxed with a handfull of rage. Great Stuff stay wit it.

peAce

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i really liked this, such a collage of fear anger and rage that was confusing but it still prevailed with a sliver of understanding, nice drop, 1luv.

Does anyone really know the true meaning of this? Because you know what I do... The pain and heartbreak of gettin a speeding ticket... I feel for you deep. When ur only way to get ur fustations is taken away you go crazy and explode. keep writin. F4L JT

You got it right JT. When you get the only thing in life taken from you, you go and do things never imagined. Thanks to all for the feedback. JT F4L.

MM

I personally know what it is like to get a speeding ticket. I've been given many and I've gotten out of many. It is like that one time where you see that cop walking up to your car, your heart sinks. I feel you, and this post has a lot of meaning to it. Just gotta keep your head on and keep going. Great poem

Thanks for the feedback everyone. Keep it coming. Angel believe me my head is on and staying on. When its off I do stupid things and I get myself in more trouble. Once again, thanks for the feedback everyone.

MM

Its a nice story kid.. And i liked how u broke it down in sections.. this was interesting.. I liked how you worded shit and how u explained it with expressions dope drop..

good piece, nice wordplay and flow, the creativity was decent as well, all in all good drop...peep myn..faith

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