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IP: 020A 4147
I can't stand the world, I'm seen wearin' my head-set
Always listened to 2Pac, but I ain't seen "Better Days" yet Another day another struggle, a teen so misunderstood These emotions are within, I've yet to see the good A tear runs down my cheek, I lose more of my soul For all this to be gone, would mean I've reached my goal My shadow has abandoned me, it's found a better place But I aint goin' nowhere, I'm in an enclosed space I feel as though I'm worthless, is anybody there? Someone who can help me, who can mend my dispair I should exit this world, I have nothin' to live for Too many pressures arise, I can't continue on anymore If only it would all fade away, maybe then I would be successful Life's a tug-of-war, and I aint got the strength to pull A dark cloud over head, I'm in a state of depression Bein' released from the womb, that's my ultimate regression ANY FEEDBACK WILL BE MUCH APPRECIATED! |
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Aint Nobody Iller Than Me
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IP: 020A 4147
Anybody gon' hit this up?
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IP: 3340 B04F
not much I can say, cept.... damn...
your flow was damn good, you had some good vocab, and some good metties... I was feelin this shit... you put forth some emo. in this shit... which made it a nice drop... I'll be checkin your open mics now, so far I like what I see... kkeep droppin dawgy... ~Ashy~ |
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Aint Nobody Iller Than Me
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IP: 4678 90A9
Thanks for the feedback dogg.
UPPIN.... |
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Aint Nobody Iller Than Me
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IP: 9CEA B5DF
UPPIN!
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Aint Nobody Iller Than Me
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IP: D034 4C7A
Can I get some more feedback on this y'all?
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Guest
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IP: D034 4C7A
This was dope as hell dogg! If you made this into a longer peice I'd even think it could earn the title of an RB Legend. PROPS on the drop man.
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Aint Nobody Iller Than Me
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IP: D034 4C7A
Yeah I'm workin' on lengthening it up right now. Thanks!
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Aint Nobody Iller Than Me
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IP: D034 4C7A
QUIT SLEEPIN' ON THIS Y'ALL!!!
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Light Weight
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IP: F19F D969
Your piece has a flow to it. And you picked a good topic, it was interesting enough to read. I would recommend adding metas and multies and your wordplay will improve as you write more. Stay active and you'll elevate....you show some potential...keep posting them open mics and choose topics you think people will be interested in reading.
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Guest
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IP: 85B5 6695
the flow was good but the vocab wasnt all that and it was good but i think u could have done better fa real.......keep ya head up and keep droppin to elevate aight..........im just givin straight feedback cuz its what u want......
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IP: 07E0 A9F2
thought in some ways this was a good verse...it flowed decent enough, but it was a bit basic, reading like a poem........on the whole i thought it was pretty average........but no hatin....peace!
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