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Neva Let My Knees Buckle
IP: CEF5 716F
(my bad- i forgot to put my replies in)--just 10 ---bein whte ---Rnc---for the cause-- word perfect---ultimate competition i could tell it was a bad day when i woke up late for work// had to go in and start my day right away wit paperwork// gettin paid to go baserk-FUCK IT!! I'M GOIN POSTAL!// nah, gotta keep my cool and do what i'm suposed to// gotta keep my head on straight-keep the bills from being late// i got 5 mouths to feed and gotta keep food on their plate// everyday i make mistakes! but yo i'm learnin lessons// and if i learn from my mistakes i'll be the wisest in my profession// but right now, i'm livin check to check broke as fuck// needa change of luck cuz i'm about to destruct// the human tickin time bomb-next to be on the news accused of pipebombs// or snipin' from the rooftops wit rifles drawn// but the safest way to kill someone is when i write songs// cuz 25 witta "L" is way too fuckin long// i stay strong, even wit the weight of the world in arms// and neva let my knees buckle, MOTHAFUCKA BRING IT ON!!
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let's get this shit straight, i'm here to eliminate- them squadz wit feminine traits, there's no escape! Last edited by .D. CYPHA : 11-06-03 at 09:58 PM. |
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Can u beat me?..Hell No
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IP: 06AE 0DEE
this was a pretty nice drop playa u had some nice bars wit some good vocab...........but u should change your structure up....paragraph form makes it harder to read
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IP: ABE5 5A5C
i tried to go back and seperate the lines like you said-it looks a little better--the main thing is, it rides perfect to the beat though. i appreciate the feedback!
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let's get this shit straight, i'm here to eliminate- them squadz wit feminine traits, there's no escape! Last edited by .D. CYPHA : 11-02-03 at 11:35 PM. |
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IP: B7D6 05D6
I really appriciate that cause I'm basically the same now
I liked the words and I measured the pros and cons of crime on occassion |
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IP: 807E A7B7
lol nice drop good way to express yur self but im sorry vocab wus ight umm up yur multi syablles a bit more but nice drop ight flow up lil bit more werk u be strait wid it umm ill give u a 7/10
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IP: ABE5 5A5C
uppin 4 feedback
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one wink
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IP: B691 B3C4
Hey bud, can you post your replies to three other peoples stuff? Its in the rules if you need more info.
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IP: CC07 EC19
This peice is ok, a little short and cudda bin elevated in certain places. Vocab was a little weak I think, and some of the rhymes are played.
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IP: 7E8B C42C
this writting is good i know i am a beginner but i would like to show u whati got
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IP: ABE5 5A5C
thanx 4 the feedback...uppin 4 more
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IP: DF7B C8F7
this verse was ok...kinda basic..try usin a bigger vocab n work on your structure...had some nice lines just a lil to basic
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