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10-28-03, 12:18 PM | #1 | ||||||
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Fictional Peace
IP: 41AE D395
This Is An Audio To Be... Look For The Audio In My Sig When I Complete It...
Confusing Questions, With No Answers Bein Mentioned Peace Bein Deceased Reason For Stress And Tension Keepin Our Children Guessin, Whats Right And Wrong We're Simply Carressin, The Sin That Consumes Us All Why Dont We Learn Our Lession Before We Are All Gone? Why Do We Wait, Until It's Too Late And So Proned To Stall Just Siezing Peace, Relieving Grief, But Realisticly The Fact Is That, We Should Forget It, The Results Are Brief Quests For Less Tests Of Hate Would Be Great Just To Get Blessed Nevertheless We Stress, Our Community's Got People Puttin Holes In Innocent Chests... Government Swears Its Best... To Leave Em Alone... Dont Wanna Be Bothered... I'd Love To Follow A Thug Home Just To Meet His Mother And Father World Bein Cursed By Hatrid And Rage Bein Staged Caged In Racism Lacing Together Hate And Fate Descrimination And Hatrid Claiming Domination To Nations Evil Indications, Fake Friendships Ending In Tragic Relations Temptations To Procrastinate Will Decide Our Occupations Patience And Hardword Results In Success Innovations Too Many Lives Bein Taken, Too Many Hearts Are Racin Tastin, Smellin, Hatrid Causin Body Chalk Tracins Thinkin We Too Mature To Learn From This Horrid Type Lifestyle I Dont Care How Old You Are, You're Still Just An Innocent Child Mildly Understanding Reasons For This Type Of Piece Honest Truth Spoken Of Real Yet Fictional Peace
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10-28-03, 12:24 PM | #2 | |||
Fuck You, I Rhyme Better
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this was deep, good thought provocing ideas
i like the line about following a hoodlum home...iv always wondered whats that like.. flow was nice, this would be nice in audio... no real flaws good job kid if you would be so kind, check the sig and choose one |
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10-28-03, 04:55 PM | #3 | ||||||
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IP: 3CF6 3147
Word To Your Mother ^....
Uppin
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10-28-03, 09:34 PM | #4 | |||||||
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IP: CC5F FBE5
that was raw, good work
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10-29-03, 03:43 PM | #5 | ||||||
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IP: 3CF6 3147
uppin
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10-30-03, 12:26 PM | #6 | ||||||
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IP: 41AE D395
uppin for some feedback
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10-30-03, 05:33 PM | #7 | ||||||
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IP: 3CF6 3147
upp :
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11-04-03, 02:31 PM | #8 | ||||||
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IP: A555 8CD7
Hey little man
Im trying to find you Where ya at |
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11-04-03, 06:01 PM | #9 | ||||
Straight Savage.
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IP: 8BEC CACE
Nice drop, flow was there, vocabulary was there.
You seem to have a good knowledge of writing, and though I didn't see anything outstanding you seem to have done a nice job with writing this piece. Nice display of everything in a good piece Good job.
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11-04-03, 09:59 PM | #10 | ||||||
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IP: 3CF6 3147
^ Thank You... All Feedback Much Appreciated
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11-04-03, 10:15 PM | #11 | ||||||
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IP: C1DA C961
'Twas good, not much to critique, just a decent overall piece with solid structure
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11-06-03, 08:49 AM | #12 | ||||
Eddy.
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IP: FF40 570D
This was deep..
And it flowed well..some nice aspects used in it... And i would like to hear the audio version ... Nice drop...
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11-06-03, 08:51 AM | #13 | ||||||
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IP: 41AE D395
^ Thank You... Yeah... I've Still Been Too Lazy For The Audio... lol
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11-06-03, 08:52 AM | #14 | ||||
Eddy.
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IP: FF40 570D
^Lmao..
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11-06-03, 08:55 AM | #15 | |||||||
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drama piece
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^that was my fav part of the piece, overall the vocab was good flowed alright, only thing i didnt like was the uppercase on every word.. that got kind of anoying. i feel ya on the audio i want to make all my open mics audio but dont have the equipment to, and when i go to get it someone usually calls me up and wants to party so im like screw it ill do it next friday. If you get the chance, plz drop some feedback on Rules of the Game (its in my sig) thx
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