Reply-Sthash-regarless, Polars half-Sand,Jay R- Mic Life






DOPE LINES MAK RAP ADDICTS OUTTA DETOXEES....
FLOW TO UNORTHADOX U CANT DROP THESE.......
MY AIM LEAVE LAMES WIT CEREBAL PALSY LEANS......
U KNOW ITS WAR WIT ME TELL ME WHAT YALL MEAN,NAH MEAN.....

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I know its Stomach turning, niggas cringe when I flow//
Just 2 months of learning its like I binge when I flow//
When I spit it Acidic liquids burn my enamel//
Like gatlins when I'm rappin can't out manuever my ammo//
Now that reruns gone, I'm most known 4 poppin//
U can't see son in the throne u wasn't given an option//
Mics I bless it, u just need 2 digest the flame//
Take ya best shot, it will 4ever reflect ya aim//
U not in the picture, mind frames just aint the same//
My post lyricaly are not for the faint and lame//
Flow on point like eskimo nipples literally Shank the brain//
It really aint no mystery that u fake insane//
epileptics in earthquakes wit straps u got shaky aim//.

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DOPE LINES MAK RAP ADDICTS OUTTA DETOXEES....
FLOW TO UNORTHADOX U CANT DROP THESE.......
MY AIM LEAVE LAMES WIT CEREBAL PALSY LEANS......
U KNOW ITS WAR WIT ME TELL ME WHAT YALL MEAN,NAH MEAN.....
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Droppin shit, destroyin hopes of most optimist//
Behead enemies leave ya esophagus topless//
My cirriculum consist of sicka synonyms//
Thoughts in my cerubulum hit and move the other side like pendulums//
Young a unsung immortal u can not injure him//
Damage ya manhoods, change genders wit tha phlegm//
Greatness, I'm so close like lew Al Cindor 2 a rim//.
Over heads like condoms, don't understand my uncanny spits//
Ya click softer than johnsons after granny on tranny flicks//
Murda u 2day com 4 ya squad 2morrow//
Sub-machines rise up like Govener Arnold//
Hope ya next of kin got lungs up 4 borrow//
4 testin him riddle bodys initial chest like Zorro//

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DOPE LINES MAK RAP ADDICTS OUTTA DETOXEES....
FLOW TO UNORTHADOX U CANT DROP THESE.......
MY AIM LEAVE LAMES WIT CEREBAL PALSY LEANS......
U KNOW ITS WAR WIT ME TELL ME WHAT YALL MEAN,NAH MEAN.....
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Ravenous savage is havin his way, he's unstable//
Spits like dillingers do Damage navigate thru ya navel//
Autopsy 2 prove u not me examinate on the table//
Title of great ya squad need it quadrapledgic disabled//
The best who eva writ it, no figmant of imagination//
As sure as me walkin in a liq an gettin followed by Asians//
U still a dick rider even if u swallow on occasion/
The cat yall hate pour alchohol on all abrasions//
Quick 2 pull out diesel like Reginald Dennehy//
Ya reign on RA is over unless u a friend of me//
Flow blow minds from many angles like u John F Kennedy//
Teflon Don step on all mini me's//
U eat many emcees me I'm much more finicky//.
Blasphamy, is simply unforgivable
Simiar 2 ya chick lickin anotha mans genitals//
I am the pinnacle//
Flow spans like octupus tenticles u still sinnacle/
Salute ya future general//.
Power 2 shut u all the fuck up but I'll mute u in intrevals//
I'm crushin ya bones droppin ya spinal//
Do I have to remind u//
I'm part machine mostly beast like Optimus Primal//

--youngnut

needs a lil work but it came real hard and meaningful just needs punches better designed to fit in rhyme

More feedback huh

Yo I liked this piece, I definatly liked the fact that you used alot of discriptive words, and the phrases were very fluent. try using less words in your rhymes that sound the same tho, i would definatly love to hear audio to this tho, it was nice
keep it up!...



http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...8277#post908277

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...8313#post908313

i liked that shit... good descriptive words, but it does need some workpretty good piece overall though......................................

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it was ok, but its to basic and im not into the bragging stuff, you should try writing to a topic, thats the only way you will really elevate. anyone could do braging tracks but it takes real skill to do a topic.

you aint really saying shit, dont know were word perfect got meaningful lines from.

this was a nice yet total peice right here... seems like its good n ready to be spat n rec over a beat n shit.. lyrics were nice for the most part... the hook was missin something.. not quite sure what it was but it didnt take from the track though.. put it 2 a beat yo.1

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IJL.i thought id acknowledge it/now compotitions "losin faith" like Christopher Wallace did//
Step n ur dyin,getN no credit 4tryin/Only time u was in a bitch was ya class trip 2 ellis island/ Please believe? i speak da truth/i see U like retarded kids in empty rooms playin peek-A-boo //
in a battle?id disembowel any withN a circumfrance,kid 45th is da toughest/so like an armless janitor ud"kick da bucket"//