Posted In: Jay-R, Restricted, Deva

Masta C:
Its just so hysteric that my lyrics….impacted some ones life…
Took their spirit like I was awarded a merit….over this strife…
Things are just not right cause its endless fight to get nada just zip..
Cause alotta things just stop ya but I gotta think quick…
With all these depressing things they are just clotting my veins…
Cant get good thoughts through so its just rotting my brain…
Lies cloud my decisions, I just cant seem to think straight…
Im falling into envisions…..that just don’t seem that great…
With death falling upon me….i just cant seem to stop it…
I think Im hot shit but im just a failure that just doesn’t got it..

Ken Dawg:
It seems as though that I just don't mean shit no more...
I can't help it I got money and not like everyone else dirt poor
You may say that this rhyme is made out of shit...
Hell for all you know…I didn't even write it!
Nobody tells me anything no more, it don't matter..
I'll just sit back and let it all shatter...listen to the splatter..
Cause In the end all it seems is that everyone is cryin,
And I can hear their tears hit on the tin while they are dyin
So fuck it don’t you tell me shit cause im in harmony
Cause I new from the beginning she would end up with me!!

You both put down some pretty nice shit. The advice I can give is to be more emotional, I just wasnt feelin it. But I liked the flow of it, your scheme was pretty good. al around a good drop homie. Hey, go peep my shit, its in the Open Mic right now. I would appriciate that.

OUT

-High Class a.k.a Confusion

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for a key that was well writ

masta c - nice flow stayed on topic choice of words didnt hurt you
good job dog...not much to improve on a key you know but if it was written i would say to use a couple of analogies and u are set

ken dawg - flow was ok kinda on and off at topic...eh got me off guard at the end (it might be cuz im sick) anyway not bad for a key though just try to stay on topic more

hit up my open mic its in my sig

peace

Hey thanks for the feedback so far..Keep the feedback coming in..Its Much Appreciated, Thanks.

that was good. i couldnt really see what the the topic was suposed to be about though. they were both nice drops though.