Yeah This Is Bout My Gf She Had My Kid And Which Ill Admit Im Whipped N Im Not Ashame To Admit I Love Her...Stricty Good Shit Tho



I Love You

Your Love Is Like The Pyramids Cuz Its So High
I Can Never Forget The First Time You Passed By
Sittin Der Lookin Beautiful Wit Ur Curly Hair
That Body Can Ruin Any Niggas Nightmare
I Never Dreamed Of U Gettin On Me N The Back Of A Car
Shit I Was Going Through At Da Tyme Was Hard
No Phone Numbas,That Night Was Over We Both Going Our Ways
I Watched You Walk Into Your House Amazed
Thinking U Was A Witch The Way U Put On A Spell
Im Not The Devil But I Been Through Hell

2 Dayz Lata My Boyz Called, Sayin U Wanna C Me,Dont Know Wat To Do Now
Realizing This Shit Is Like A Elevator Cuz My Feelings Going Down
Its Finalized Now We Gonna Be Datin
I Feel Like Im On The Discovery Channel Everyday We Matin
Now U Pregnant We Gonna Have A Kid Watch The Growth Of Ur Mid
As The Boy Came Out And No Longer Hid
As Now I Simply Think It Through
Realized How Much Im In Love Wit You

My First Open Mic...Blah

I respect you alot hommie. The rhyme scheme was simple, and I would say use more vocab. But I got a feeling thats nt your style. I hope you and your new family does good hommie, you got my blessings. I dont give a fuck what anyone say's, there aint nothen wrong with bing whipped by somone you love. IM whipped by my ladie, and I dont care. LOL. I liked this hommie, I can relate to this. Me and my girl almost had a Baby. It was a scare, but I realized how much she loved me and I loved her. Good drop hommie.

OUT

-High Class a.k.a Confusion

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that was a good piece, i liked the flow and emotion had some good metas...good luck on your kid and girlfriend...pz

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it was simple but it flowed nice
dis joint was deep had sum good metas
dis song will make me think twice if I get my gurl close 2 havin a child...
and my blessing goes out 2 your new family

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okay I will go from the bad to the good.. first of I didn't really like teh rhyme scheme it seemed stretched in some parts then shortened in others.. and the vocab was a bit limited... BUT.. overall as a piece it was really good I can feel the emotion you put into it.. and it really was a piece that you felt strong about.. good luck to you and your family..
7/10

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Wasn't Bad For A First.. can Tell It Came From Ya Hear
N' Shit.. So That Was Good To See.. Work On The Basic
Shit You Was Pullin.. Get Sum Ill Flow Wit Sum Nice
Creativity n' Complextion.. That'll Make It Doper

Thanks For All The Support Mad Appreciate It...

yo envy, that shit was hot. its aight to be whipped. but you know how girls are? they just got that thing that makes guys just fuckin pussies. oh well. holla

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Aiyyo I like this shit envy. It had a lot of emotions and deepnees to it. Kinda basic but nevertheless a good drop. BTW, good luck on ur new family.