http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthr...0809#post940809
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http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthr...0816#post940816


Before you hit ya teens all ya need is mechanical machines
Toy soldiers plastic guns living life full with dreams
But then you hit 13, suddenly it fades into the distant
Becoming an adolescent, an instinctive young delinquent
Then the finer sex glow bright with a contagious kinda light
Ya get urges and impulses, you just wanna spend the night
Excited thoughts, obsessions you can suddenly see
Set forth on the journey ahead to maturity set free
Just turned the key to pleasure beyond anything before
Ignore ya parents, just make sure ya lock ya bedroom door
Once ya started it needs feed, to coin a phrase it breeds
Blond, brunette, redhead, Asian, Chinese or any greed
All ya want is lovin, sexy women gotta keep em coming
Next thing you know “fuck bitch” there’s a bun in her oven
Cos in Irresponsibility lies a lesson aint just good times
But that’s another rhyme, this ones on women ‘the easy kind’
You soon find in fucking that with the good comes the bad
A lot more emotion, more than lust with sessions compared
Cos their brains work different, minds indifferent in some ways
You’ll never understand them, like finding the end to a maze

Women…some are good lovers and don’t cause shit
While others cause shit and make bad lovers,
Some make good mothers, while others smother
Cos Women……...we all need lovers

As you get older ya get bolder in the playing ways
Ya pass the times of novelty, ya just entered the next phase
Ya a bit older think you learnt some tricks of the trade
But ya still too young to fully comprehend how to evade
Now ya tactics change attentions turned to pull’n in clubs
Racking buds, eyes on young ladies n droppin love doves
All over ya on the dance floor performing erotic moves
Soon as it goes further, they soon dance to a different groove
This sorta gets ya thinkin, been sleepin round for awhile
I night stands after another, morning makeup’s looking vile
Endless sex is all good, but early leaving without meaning
Doesn’t seem to hit with the hardest screaming feeling
Cos A relationship settles ya, strengthens and makes ya strong
But ya only touchin on the feeling, afraid ya getting it wrong
They fuck wit ya emotion they don’t only screw with ya cock
They pack up leave there back then again ya dropped
Cos when ya young love is quick and it’s just as fast to stop

Women…some are good lovers and don’t cause shit
While others cause shit and make bad lovers,
Some make good mothers, while others smother
Cos Women……...we all need lovers

I step older so a new set of rules to playing the game
The scores have changed, now im looking for more than fame
The time has come to root not run settle down for good
Find n fall in love, seal it with the vows blessed from above
Cos You’ve played and been played seen a lot of wild women
So collect all of their good point and to a stunner give em
The ideal woman you’ve found, yes you’ll know in ya heart
With Missing beats, bounds and leaps, could this be the start
Just Embarked, its goin good, its different from the past
Flawless passion both happy and feeling totally relaxed
Ya take the next step, move in and share all ya possessions
This time you know its true, learnt from all them past lessons
No Confessions completely at ease, so what does that leave?
That you’re the perfect partners, a true integrated weave
So Ya hit it on the head, knocked the final nail into the bed
Ya found the perfect woman to love for life until your dead

Women…some are good lovers and don’t cause shit
While others cause shit and make bad lovers,
Some make good mothers, while others smother
Cos Women……...we all need lovers

dope expression about the topic. you know what you must do now. find that some one and flow the song to him/her.

Long but good expressed thru the topic, some good immagery , ..flow was off on some points, ...but it was an ok read..

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yo man. only one word to describe this. and that one word is "dope". I was feelin this the whole way through flow was there I thought some decent vocab and multi's and wordplay. rhyme scheme was tight and like always so was ur structure but like Dulce said the hook needs some work but other then that dope shit bro. keep on reppin CV brotha. peace.

forgot to mention about this part

Ya found the perfect woman to love for life until your dead

it may seem like that^ until divorce comes along lol. naw juss kiddin. lol

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Yeah man i agree this was a good drop.....it was long lol but it made a good read, definitely worth it.....Your structure was really nice in this i thought nothing really bad about it....Your vocab was nice as usual lol....but overall this was a good piece...keep at it.

i liked this piece, had good immigery a good flow and an overal great base on the topic...keep it up pz

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Open Mics
The Weathers Art
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=108673
My Teenage Eyes
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...threadid=104850
Secluded
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...851#post1148851
Open Your Eyes
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...461#post1157461

thnx people, appreciated.....Pz

can i get some more feed here like.............Pz