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Cinderella's Dead
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A girl I know wrote this, I think it's dope and wanted to share. It's called Cinderella's Dead.
Cinderella died today... and let me be honest, I care, even though I pretend I don't/ My feelings bleed through my seemingly tough skin and soak the ground/ weaving a river of denial that separates you and I/ I take out the tool-kit I keep inside my heart and try to build a bridge/ but your chainsaw of gut instict cuts it to pieces, and I watch the shards float down the river of my discontent/ You made an SOS sign out of sticks and stones/ It said "i Don't fEel the sAme way, Darling."/ Those sticks and stones didn't break my bones/ but I wish they would have killed me/ Death seemed so much better than facing you through red-rimmed eyes/ But the sun kept setting/ the people kept dying/ my eyes kept crying/but I kept going/ Be content with your painted-on faces/ the Beautiful Ones who can lie/ and abuse you/So let them/ you like it/ They found the body/ a gagged and bounded sunken treasure/ lying cold and broken at the bottom of that blood-red river/ |
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You Need To Leave 3 links Or 3 names of peoples you left feedback in or this will get closed/deleted..
But this was alright i thought....this is more of another poetic piece i think of yours or your friends...but the lines should be structured a bit better though, try to keep them the same length though....but this had some emotion in....overall this was alright...keep at it. |
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IP: C1DA C961
i think this was more of a poetic shit than a writting rhyme or key
but it was nice |
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i agree poetic,,,but felt it....didnt like the way you leave gaps inbetween the bars though.....pZ
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