|
|
|
|
| Phenom | Kingz | Dabatos | TonySelf | Tha Q | Half Breed | Tito | 7th End | RV Radio  |
01-24-04, 12:14 AM
|
#1
|
||||||
|
Guest
|
Armenian Genocide
IP: 7A67 4647
A BORN LEADA
REPRESENTIN ARMENIANS NIGGAZ A LOST BROKE TRIBE NOW WE DEALAZ GOD HELP US PLEASE PROVE THESE NIGGAZ WE HAD ENEMIES 1 9 1 5 TELL EM WHAT WE SEEN IMA TURK KILLA FUCK THE NAZIS TOO YEA U NO THIS SHIT IZ TRUE HEY TURKZ ITS ONE THING 2 FAKE 1 DEATH BUT 1.5 MILL NA I WENT CHILL IM GONNA KEEP FIGHTIN N WRITIN U POLITICAL CATZ CAN STOP DEBATIN AND RATIN CUZ THE TRUTH IZ TOLD WE WUZ BROKE LIVIN IN THE COLD TYME FOR THA TURKZ 2 SPILL THE BEANS N RICE YEA INO IM NICE ROLL THE DICE HIT SNAKE EYEZ THESE ARENT NO LIEZ LOOKIN THE MIRRAZ SEEN DEAD NIGGAZ ARMENIANZ BEEIN SHOT N TORTURED HAVE U HEARD THE WORD GENOCIDE ITS WESTSIDE THATS WE RIDE THE 619 213 NOW FREE BUT WE STILL RUNNIN FROM THE POLICE GOT MA M4 ON LEASE WE WELL NEVA HAVE PEACE REST IN PEACE 2 MY COMRADES 1915 WESTSIDE OUTLAW  _________________________________________________ Last edited by Armo On Da Mic : 02-02-04 at 05:15 PM. |
||||||
|
|
01-24-04, 12:17 AM
|
#2
|
|||||||
|
New to RB
|
IP: EED2 4F8F
yo that was aight...need a bit more of a flow and structure ya know?
a bit simple too...but keep at it son....
__________________
Knowledge Is King |
|||||||
|
|
|
01-24-04, 12:21 AM
|
#3
|
||||||
|
Guest
|
IP: 7A67 4647
thx bro its my first eva
|
||||||
|
|
|
01-24-04, 03:02 AM
|
#4
|
||||
|
Word.
|
IP: DD10 0DFF
This was alright.....just lose the CAPS in the piece though, kinda hurts the eyes a bit or it just might be from being late lol...structure needs some work though, try to even the lines out a bit though man to help the structure out a lot....vocab was ok.....try adding some multies to this though to make it better....the flow in this was alright....but for your first piece it was ok...keep elevating and keep at it man
 |
||||
 
|
|
 |
| Thread Tools | Search this Thread |
| Display Modes | |
|
|
Linear Mode
