fuck it...

yo a rap board? call me the rap-lord//
if i aint invited ill coem thru the back-door//
i aint new to da game but im new-to-da-board//
i spit shells and send two-to-ya-hor//
and maybe a few-to-ya-porch//
im from nj theres nuthin i wouldnt do-to-ya-porshe//
im not sumone who u should be playin-wit-man//
ill make ya whole life a scene like puffy's makin-da-band//
im takin a stand..im makin sum plans B//
ya shit aint a challenge like the marlins vs. the yankees//
im the most illest, ill grab a knife and cut ya throat wit it//
im the most known villain, i beat emcees in a short minute//
im more worse in person, especially when im cursin//
there will never be anotha guy ull feel sorry about versin//
fuck it im not done, around here im the hot one//
real emcees here? nah i dont spot none//
the only thing ya pussies claim u got is shotguns//
and ya so ugly when ya fucked ya pregnant-lady//
the bitch came out with creatures that resembled gremlin-babies//
and for the record im known to make bitches piss themselves wit four-words//
and ill "blow-up" in ya face so ya cant "C4"-wards// (forwards)
( yea yea)

You need to leave 3 links or 3 names of people you left feedback to or will get deleted..

but this was alright i thought.....structure was ok, could use a bit of work though, towards the end it kinda got stretched lines but nothing real big.....liked the multies you used....vocab in this was alright...overall alright piece...keep at it.

reply to three other open mics and post links to your replies in this thread, or it gets deleted.
thanks

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Life isn't a bitch...
she's just sick of being personified -Sage Francis

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http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=97163
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...4458#post974458

yo man that was alright.....igot what u were sayin' most of the way but kinda lost on the.........



but any way ur sh**t was tight

yo homie,

u elevatin...... jus keep up wit ur flow n up ur vocab, multis, n youll be fire.

return the favor please
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=97593

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