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Rb's new Hitman...Peep this
IP: BF73 1D69
On the real...im serious about mine..
remember the name..Jihad...RB's new Hitman...yo Unless I die I testify you will never guess the guy .. So accurate .. foe maggots get their crest demised Puff blunts wit cess inside and I’m best when high Surging’s splurging servants who test my sessions tide I crept, they cried .. suffering from pain and agony Got a sweet tooth, woes are just blamed on cavities I bring the faculty on who claims they tracking thee It’s ludicrous especially when chambers’ backing me I’ve trained in mad degrees, bloods soaking in ya pelts No ammo? Run upon you and choke you witta belt So sulking wouldn’t help, my provokings the rudest Tread lightly, or I’ll leave your croaking so prudent Joking is useless, shells’ exploding so crude, bitch I’m copping arms larger than the bulk-ness of Brutus A cult is in movement .. I’m snatching white sheets Conversing wit bullets and I don’t ration my speech Laughing at geeks by-standing trying to count ‘em off Dust you guys .. duck and hide .. you’re bound to fall Clown them all .. probably get locked in hell for this Pop a shot, then whole communities dropping Celsius peace one |
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IP: A552 E1D0
Change your name, now.
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IP: BF73 1D69
Why...
Jihad means holy war.. im a muslim MC..whats wrong with that?.. any1 wanna critique about the rhyme..not my name please.. |
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There use to be a incredibly respected by the name of G.Hod.
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IP: 24A3 0EF0
rhyming lots of words isnt cool
and neither is your name you'd think after you typed jihad in as a name when u registered you wuda seen that it was taken |
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IP: BF73 1D69
Nah i entered the name {jihad}...
because ive allways had that name....im not gonna change it.. ''rhyming lots of words isn't cool?''..wtf...said it like a pro son.. uppin this for maby some REAL critiques |
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IP: A9A7 727D
okay, your rhyming and internals and multies are all fairly decent....this didn't seem to flow to me. I thought that you put so much emphasis on the rhyming and rhyme scheme that your flow died a horrible horrible death. And your content was garbage. Try writing about something that takes some thought as opposed to something I can hear on MTV. Your writers voice was weak also. If you write about things that matter to you, your writers voice will come across as stronger.
Now change your name before I get E-Pink Belly yoo!
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IP: BF73 1D69
^^
Cool thanks,... but i think i'll keep the name bro.. peace one |
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